All Comments on 'Forbidden Pt. 03'

Excellent! 5 stars

Well done - Looking forward to their debut into the world. 5*

Well written but for the odd typo. But why so rough when the characters are so deeply in love? Surely this would call for gentleness and teasing? I look forward to seeing how the relationship develops.

Really enjoyed this one. Excellent resolution of the pent-up longing from the first two parts. 5 stars!

Great story! Only thing I didn't like was the roughness, not my thing. I think you will need to post the epilogue! Look forward to reading about what happens to them. 5 stars!!

Not a big fan of the brother/sister thing. More of the mother/son relationship. But it was OK. Like many of you out there the rough stuff seem a bit over the top. Had it been me I would have gently and very carefully made love to my sister who gave herself to me for Keeps. I would have spend many minutes exploring her body. Tasting her mouth. Licking on her beautiful breast. And tasting her sweet pussy. After we had made love for the very first time....I would have slid down her, after I was soft, and I would have eaten our fuck juices. Taking time to explore her butt hole.

No to rough stuff.

An amazing story. I wasn't sure about his violent attitude. But. I was very happy with the ending. Keep it going.

Good story..n great writing..u kept it hooked till the end

Wish you write more N continue this story

5* for all the 3 chapters from me, the roughness at end made the story a bit different than the usual stories, although it would been just as fine without it as well, looking forward to your next stories if you're going to continue that is, one thing i would suggest you is that to not post stories in parts, it affects the ratings.

Comments cover all 3 chapters. Very good story. I liked the character development, and story in general. Hope you will continue with a new story. Thanks.

I thought it was one of if not the best story I have ever read on literotica. It had everything that one hopes to find in a love story. Thank you for sharing it with us!!!

5 stars 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟 🌟, even though I'm not into the rough stuff. Please post your epilog.

I totally forgot to add a correction...

It washed over her like a wave, dragging her under, her body helpless to fight his under toe.

This should have been undertow. When you pull something, you're towing it.

I just read all three chapters in one sitting. If this is your first time writing something, I'll very much be looking forward to what you put out next. Having said that, you did misspell enough words, and got repetitive enough that you should really consider looking for an editor so they can make corrections and suggest alternatives to some words. In particular, Colton smirked way too much.

Great story, into my favourites

5/5 look forward to the next bit

Great story, please continue. With separate mums l would like to see Sunshine think it's OK to get pregnant?

Really enjoyed reading this story. The character development was well done and I loved the roughness. If you’d like to post more stand-alones or continue with the story, it would great to see how they explore the D/S themes you’ve alluded to.

I want more! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

This is awesome. You should definitely write books. My only complaint though is using ‘ya’ instead of ‘you’. It’s distracting.

You must continue this story

A great read

I liked much of the story but in this section Colton becomes very unlikable because of the way he treats his sister. Their sexual encounter speaks less of love then his demand of domination. He is almost violent with her, I saw very little tenderness or love in the manner he treated his sister.

Absolutely loved this part! Onii-chan can be a lot rougher if he wants, zero problems here! Do you post on AO3 too by any chance? I'd love to vote and bookmark this little gem X3

The characters were so well written and I actually appreciate how natural their dialogue seems. Thank you for this story!!!

Really, really loved this! Hope to read more bro/sis stories from you!

I actually found the roughness to be the antithesis of the love Colton supposedly has for Heather. If she's wanting to be submissive to him, then he can dominate her without being violent at the same time. Just demanding her obedience and commanding her to do his bidding would have been more appropriate.

I still gave this a 5 back 7 or 8 months ago. I'm regretting that decision now and I'm thinking of changing it to a 4.

Need her to have his babies.