by Sylvester_Ladywater
This is such a wonderful, powerful and fulfilling story.
The story was ok.. But it read like a research paper like you thought to much and too hard when writing looking for the right words and analogies instead of letting thing flow naturally.
for fucks sake do us all a favour and at least try having sex before you try writing about it,this is fucking painful id sooner watch the dogs shagging than try and get myself off to this shite,go throw yourself off a bridge you fucking retard this is fucking awful.