All Comments on 'Found'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
ABSOLUTE WORST

Worst story I've read on this site!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
horrible story !!!!

what was that ??? you want us to believe that ??? i mean like...horrible is the right word...absolutely horrible !!!

djllcdjllcalmost 13 years ago

so good to read a cast related story!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Nice try.

The scene on the beach with the women trying to cope with their injuries was not bad, but overall this story misses the mark because you don't have even a halfway credible premise.

kjohns2001kjohns2001over 11 years ago
Not so bad

Not so bad a story, needs a proofreader of course, and more explanation of what is happening. Readers are left to fill in the blanks themselves. The wannabe nurse is obviously a rich eccentric lesbian. With injuries as extensive as the ones described however there would need to be more intensive care, which means doctors and nursing staff, even if limited to one private physician and enough nursing aides to fill a round the clock roster. Of course it is just a story and so not limited to the constraints of real life, but they can help readers enjoy the story more. Given the availability of doctors and nurses who need money, and who might have less than stellar histories, fitting some into the story line would be easy, and yet still allow the wannabe nurse the freedom to do what she wants with her captive patients. So take this comment as suggestion and take it or leave it as you wish. Good luck with future efforts!

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