by BufordTJusticeTX
Get help please. Story was good but mistakes killed the fun
This fucking line from the story had me rolling with laughter..haha
" A wave of pleasure starting at my feet, it built up and shit through me like a rocket."
I'm trying really hard to visualize it, but can't🐾
You definitely need a proof reader to help you with all the spelling errors. Hard to read, but overall not a bad story.
I couldn't even finish reading this story.
An excessive number of mistakes in spelling and grammar ruins any possible entertainment value.
Fantastic story !!! I would love for this to happen to me. I wish I could dress as sexy as you and do my make-up and nails like you did. The only thing I wouldn't do is have a cock-cage -- I am a sissy faggot slut but I won't be locked. My Master and Mistress will fuck me deep and I will cum all over and eat it up for them.
please continue. This story is fantastic!!!