All Comments on 'Freeing Zelda'

it is nice, romantic - but too brief.

it feels like a summary, not a romance story.

Technical narration without any emotion - no fun to read. You missed to work out a nice story of what appears to be a great idea. And I think you got the time zones confused. At 1.27am PST nowhere in the world it is 11.27am the previous day. It would be the next day.