All Comments on 'Freshman Flirt Pt. 01: Befriending'

I see that I still have a lot to learn.

I loved it.

I can tell how it's going to play out but I'm excited for the journey. Great piece.

Author's Note: Thanks for reading and to Josh for the comment.

There was one picky error that I forgot to fix (that I've noted, anyway). Some colleges have a few very selective programs that take only the top applicants from among the current student body. When Barry says his major is undeclared, he probably should have added, "but I'm hoping to apply to the business program in the spring, assuming my grades are good enough." When he was later considering transferring to State to be with Evie, she noted that program was why he went to his college instead of hers in the first place.

Ah yes, the knife in the back. Or could it be a drop of poison for the pen? Either way, the impossible has died. Nicely written, I think. By the way, I post stories in the mature section now and then—five stars.

Part one looking good! I’m really looking forward to reading the rest soon.

Your story is great. So maybe should have told her about Mandy . Bet it was Cathy who told her,u think? Look forward to more chapters. Keep up the good work. Excellent story!!!

Very well written and true to life events as I remember my Freshman year and the hardships of keeping up with school work and trying to maintain a relationship. Keep the story going and I can't wait to see how they work things out good or bad as we think when young.

What a promising start! Can't wait to read more :)

As always, really well written, and a great start.

Strong characterizations, detailed settings, some intriguing story hooks -- excellent beginning, hope you can keep the quality at this high level. Now, onto Pt.2

THE MISUNDERSTANDING!!!

Fucking HATE that trope. I'm done here.

Author's Response:

Thanks to all who've provided feedback in whatever form. If I missed replying to anyone who commented with their username, I apologize. As to Anonymous of 4/23/23, thank you for your feedback and your rating. I'm sorry you felt it was so bad and that you focused your hate (your word) on that particular aspect rather than seeing it as the setup for what's to come in future chapters. I hope you'll find a story somewhere that you'll enjoy.