All Comments on 'Freshman Flirt Pt. 04: Romancing'

With so many other options available, it is nice to see a HEA (happily ever after) ending. Thank you for a story with familiar references and geography, well developed and likeable characters, and a believable story line.

Nicely finished!

Good story and I kept waiting for the next chapter. I also appreciated the fact that the story was complete, had a good beginning, solid middle, and even had a complete ending. Great job.

Well done!

Great story and characters. Thank you for sharing it with us. I really enjoy your stories.

Excellent ending, great story. I enjoyed it from start to finish. Keep up your excellent work. Five stars all the way.

Great story. Excellent narrative

The sex scenes were a little more extensive than necessary. Are readers really fapping to detailed depictions of middle-aged geezers shagging?

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The narrative also missed an opportunity to really dig into Barry's motivations, though Mandy briefly touched upon it when she asked him why he was still single. Barry and Mandy were casual friends as college freshmen, and then lost contact for a quarter century. Isn't Barry's pursuit of Mandy a tad obsessive? Coming to grips with Barry's fixation on revisiting events and people from a long-gone past might have given this final chapter some additional dramatic charge. I missed a more visceral evocation of the setting of Pt.1, perhaps as dialogue reference or even scenic flashback, so that I as a reader could experience emotionally Barry's nostalgia, his need to go back and fix the past, to heal time's wound.

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Freshman year of college, when you leave home for the first time, where you get to actually live with your friends, where you invent your identity, is a time of great intensity and a kind of magic. The insight that this affecting story gave me is that there is a magic that s always there, at every moment of your life. It just becomes harder to discern it as you age. Barry found that magic again, and became a newly fresh man.

There's the seven year itch. And then there is the 24 year burn. And that itch continues needing to be scratched throughout.

Good story and wonderful plain extra-ordinary human emotions. Fully and truly enjoyed it!

Great story and well written Decent logic but the logic trail has some interesting shortcomings. The 24 year hiatus during which he numbly walks through an almost monastic ignorance of his two loves is utterly unexplained. The gap makes so little sense of that the reader stumbles and stops suspending disbelief. This gap breaks the flow and the stories internal logic collapses into a series of poorly related vignettes To installments 3 & 4 thus become disjointed and the reader loses track of the metanarrative connectivity. This forces the author to resort to deux ex machina way to often further disjointing the narrative flow.

Still enjoyable romance. 5 stars.

I just finished reading the four parts of this romance and enjoyed doing it. Just the fact that the protagonists are usually decent people who carry their respect and love towards each other into the bedroom sets these stories apart from the lot. Granted, Barry's motivation to try and reconnect with the cockteasing girl he had tutored a couple of decades ago remains somewhat nebulous, but I'd have to reread one or the other paragraph to be sure, somehow it feels as if there was something in the subtext giving us an explanation. Let's say he was realizing that there might have been potential for a relationship and that he is seeking some sort of closure as a result of her almost mysterious disappearing act. Even as these thoughts and ideas are likely delusional, it's still a possibility that, at a certain time in your life, you just might want to know for sure. The guy is in a safe place economically, but otherwise stalling,vso he is grasping at straws in a way.

This is well worth 5 stars anyhow. I try to remember other contributions I have read on Literotica and how those fare in regards of stars appointed to them. That way the rating becomes a no-brainer.

A really good story! Thanks!

4 chapters and no confrontation with Cathy? I dunno mate, Good story but lacking

On the brow or overlooking Little River?

I loved this very much. Thank you.

Nicely rounded off - well done!