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AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Confused

I loved the direction the first two chapters were going, but this one veered off. You started off with Tiffany and ended the second chapter about a mystery woman "pale skin, green (eyes, I assume), and a short head of blonde hair with red highlights," but this one is about a girl we barely even meet in the previous chapter. Where is Tiffany? Is Charlotte the mystery woman? How is this chapter tied in with the first two? Are you trying to do an anthology?

Also, if this is Freshman Week, why's it taking course over months?

ScottishTexanScottishTexanover 2 years ago

Okay, I gave you a 5 for this one. It had better details and fewer typos. Overall it was a massive improvement. Keep it up.

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