by Ernest Hemingsex
my pounding heart. What an awesome story... nice buildup, explosive conclusion. Wow.
When it is long because of repetition and too much build up, it's just boring.
How many times did you have to mention Peggy Bundy, whom really isn't pin up material. You should have used Kelly Bundy! For those of you that say this is the best incest story, you need to do a lot more reading. LOL
Well, probably not the best story found here in Literotica, but it is still good. I don't really think the story has really repeated itself. Long built up is okay too as long as it keeps the tension. Right? The story is tense enough urging me to keep on reading until it is finished. Besides, it's hot too! So I vote it a 5.
Liked the story, but thought it needed more of a climax for an ending. How about, as they are lying there in the afterglow of sex, David picks up Mom's camera and tells her to smile, then starts taking pictures of her?
Gave you a ten for build-up, but took off seven for no blow job, added three for photo session, three more for mommy doing herself, minus four for not having chapter two out yet. TOTAL 5 . Would have been more if ratings went higher.
Add a nice slow, wet, tit-fuck for good measure next time.
I thank you all for your comments, kudos, and suggestions.
Re: alternate ending with David photographing Mom--I wish I had thought of that.
Re: preference for Kelly Bundy--different strokes for different folks. Sorry, but I always liked Peggy over Kelly.
Re: compliments such as 5/5, wish it could be higher than 5, best story, and (from email) "keep up the good work," and Big Fan's detailed applause--I am very, very appreciative. Thank you.
Thank you for the compliment. Glad you liked it. Sorry, I just go to your email today. Re: the hint...my compliments--you picked up on that. The thought crossed my mind for a 3some with a girlfriend of the son in a possible chapter 2. I also wanted to add a brief bisexual flavor to Mom.
There is just something about the ultimate taboo act...making love to your own mother...that no other erotic story can come close too. Very hot...nicely done.
Totally agree with you: the taboo nature, the ultimate sexual you're-not-supposed-to-do. Totally appreciative of the compliment. Sorry for not responding sooner to your input. Thanks again.
I have only just found this,all I can say it is so well written that it is almost as if the reader is taking part.
Thank you so much for such an erotic story, it has left me totally exhausted. Please continue with more of the same.
Took a little too long for them to fuck. But i do like your discription of the actual action of fucking. Thank You.
I'm going to bed now, but I'll be back. BTW, my Mom was a hot red head too. Oh I wanted to fuck her sooooo bad.
are the orgasms I have inside my mother's cunt. No other woman can compare to her.
Just totally destroyed A good story
What fucking 22 year old would call there mother (mommie)
Gave it an undeserved ace only because there is nothing lower
Sexy, raw, immediate and so intense. Yes. Loved it.
Cannot wait to read more. Thank you for your story.
I appreciate the positive and non-positive feedback.
Keep it cummin'! ;)
Please learn what I assume is your native language before you write more for others to read.
Tho I'm not a fan of huge tits and huge dicks. Toned down, it would be much more realistic, and therefore, in my opinion, better. But each man or woman has their own fantasy, still as I said, pretty good, I'll read more of your work.
The kid started out as a wussy,by the end he was a ball of fire.Mom started out ok after dad died ,but got just what she wanted all along to fuck her son.........not a bad read..thanks