All Comments on 'Friday Fun'

Good start for a first time author. I like the way you left it open to continue on for more chapters.

Good ideas, excellent sensuality. You could use an editor to work on some of your mechanics.

Absolutely lovely. Hot? Yes. Sexy? Yes. But more importantly, absolutely lovely. Keep writing.

Good premise.

Story rushed.

Need much more teasing and edging before finger enters his ass.

Teasing his cock. His balls. His ass.

Needs involvement of her other body parts. Her breasts, for example. Visually. Touching them. Worshiping them.

Needs her to explore how he managed to get through the day with the pair of panties and bra on his cock. Did he get any work done? Was he hard all day? What did he think tonight would be like.

Nothing but beating his ass.

Two stars.