All Comments on 'Friend's Hot Sister'

Grammar sucks, but it can be distracting when it is used improperly. I hope you can find someone on the site who is willing to help edit your stories. You can make them even better,

...lots of work.

I thought it was really it was really good, it was raw, and fresh, and exciting. You perfectly captured the teenage nervousness and desire rolled into one at the novelty of early sexual encounters. The story seemed a bit rushed at points, but that only added to the sense of teenage urgency of wanting and needing that sexual release. I think the rough spots in the story are a positive rather than a negative and perfectly capture the feeling of nervous excitement that so permeated the story. Good job.