by ladiesman143
that's write not right!! WTF, and you have the balls and nerve to say someone else should go back to school. You really are the Asshole Of LIT!!! So I too will give it a 5
Won't be nice if "critics", such as the previous commentator, actually know how to write / spell themselves? Anyhow, I would say that your writing needs improvement, a little stilted, not enough detail and moved too fast, but still a good first effort and worth working on some more