All Comments on 'GB Club Ch. 04'

The entire Gang Bang Club story is an astonishing idea well-described and kept interesting throughout. The only real drawback I see is problem with frequently recurring grammatical errors that make those areas harder to read, instead of just flowing like the story should. Things that bother me the most are (1) frequent use of phrases instead of sentences, usually because of missing verbs; and (2) use of homonyms (i.e. to instead of too or two, there instead of their) and (3) some typos (her instead of here) that substitute actual words. They're things spell check wont catch but a good editor should.

All that said, I'm still looking forward with great expectation to the next installment of this series.