by BrettJ
A nice snapshot of reality with a helluva twist. Older, nice guy with sweltering hot gal that likes to keep things under her control to a point, very nice.
BRAVO!!
"that is there loss" That is their loss, doncha tink.
A bit jeckyl and hyde. I would be extremely careful in case a third character came out, one with a big knife or such.
You never explained why the other two women at the library looked at him strangely after his first date. I hate unsolved things at the end of a story. You only gave his guess, not the actual reason.
You only gave half arsed reason for her being an over the top slut. I expected more discussion about her change in behaviour at their second date.
Only 3 star as you left too much in the air.
But, seems rushed in the second half. Almost like it was written for a deadline or by a second author. Lots of loose threads also. Along with unanswered questions. All in all, not a bad start.
Good but nowhere as good as most of your stuff. Cunt lapping sex maniac UK
I was pretty sure it would turn out that she was actually the girl from the films and dressed down to keep her identity secret in order to get through without issues. Was surprised when you didn't take the story that way!