by virtualatheist
I was kind of curious when I read your name as the author and even more curious as I started the tale. Then everything became crystal clear and I laughed my ass off. Great tale.
Five Stars
Hardly seems worth trying to write any more stories now, as this one just about covers it all. Loved the comment about going bankrupt because of the spoons by the way! Definitely 5 stars. I would have given you six, but you missed out our hero winning millions on the lottery.
The only missing piece is the hero driving toward sunset in his Ford Lexus. 5*
A funny synopsis of the LW section. I could think of a few you missed but what would be the point?
Since your tongue has to be still firmly planted in your cheek. I congratulate you on being able to hit so many of the informal conventions of LW category. Some of which I hate with incredible passion although I gave of my life to read them before I found them to be faithless in their passion.
i know there must be something in the BTB catalog that you missed--but I can't think what.
That was super funny, an excellent rip on soooooo many of those loving wife stories. Well done!
Man...there have been so many times I've been tempted to write a story like this. But no need now. You hit every cliche there is, and knocked it out of the park.
Very well done.
"Wooden spoon." LOL!
Good thing you put it under humor and satire. Under LW, you would have gotten nasty comments on the characters.
Hilarious!
... This was my first read and comment in this category. Panther fan.
exceedingly well done ,
salute .
the only thing missing was Generica's
12" forked tongue in Rastus ass Cheek.
xxxhugsxxxsmilesxxxlaughterxxxx
Could have been a but better in the end it seemed like you kind of rushed it but I love the underdog going Rambo angle absolutely wonderful !
I wonder whether for some readers this had too much of the element of truth to be funny.
This is a bedtime story told by men who have been cheated on to their sons. I know, something like it was told to me when I was a kid. It was a very nasty divorce. Turned out that they both cheated and neither one were my biological parents!! LOL I'm adopted. I don't have anything to do with either of them anymore.
May be a good story but, 16" to 25" dicks, I stopped reading at that bull shit line. Why not 8' to 10' dicks. Or are you talking about a bunch of black horses? v
What an unbelievable story of how a loving wife got ruined. The story line was well thought out and captured the vernacular of both the protagonist and his magnificently well endowed adversaries. Thank you so much for sharing this original and well thought out piece of fiction. Bravo and kudos for such an unbelievable masterpiece. .
All you complainers of how unrealistic and unlikely this is need to go back and look at the category this was published under. HUMOR AND SATIRE. The whole idea was to make it unrealistic and humorous. Sheesh, some people just don't have a sense of humor.
Only stupid people can't see this is in the satire section
Get a grip , its not meant to be realistic
Couching racism in "humor" doesn't make it acceptable... the shame is that you people don't even see the racism in yourselves.... you make excuses and attempt to deflect the blame towards those you target... and you actually think you are "decent"
Can you spell S-A-T-I-R-E? Just askin'
Oh boy! What a stupid story..."...BDSM slave of a Nazi war criminal living in Bolivia?" Man, go with a shrink if you have unsolved issues with women (what is more than apparent from your story); Don't air your hate here! Please?
And that's what niggers speak.you can send them to school for 12years and they still read like a7 year old,if they can play ball (they're allowed to go to college 4more years even though they're illiterate)in the end Ebonics be all they have.Rastus, you gotta love it.
first of all I would to be excused for my bad English as I am not an English speaker
second , I think that there are a lot of mistakes in that story , you said at the beginning that she is not a cheating wife and raised as restricted person , so it will never happen to change her life style in a minute , and start to have a gang bang within a few seconds only because she was drugged
I think that you needed to show the transfer from a good wife to a cheating wife gradually,
and the end of the story is very poor, you just choose the easy way to solve the problem by making her husbend a superman who has a lot of contacts, because if he has those contact then she would know that and not try to challenge him like that
It was better that he destroy her life by getting all of them arrested foe drug dealing and destroy jer reputation using this video tape
By all the names of God, some of the commenters show how dumb they really are; The woman is called Generica Whitebread FFS. This is what people with an IQ of more than 90 call a clue!
The author is quite cleverly taking the piss out of the usual tropes used in interracial porn.
I despair of the continuing failure in the current education systems around the world, if these are the best responses to an obviously satirical work.
Sorry but this has to be the worst story I've read on this site. It's good that you don't have to rely on your writing skills to earn money, you would certainly starve to death. It's so bad that I think you wrote it as a joke .. not even worth rating because there's no zero
Loved this satire of a satire of a LW story. I'm assuming that since the "satirical" content was so over-the-top (not a hint of subtlety here!) that this was intended as such...
Geneica should have walked out as soon as she see what her friend was up to, or did she know already?
I liked what happened to the bullies best part.
That was six different kinds of racist... I know or at least hope it was satirical. .. But damn... To be fair... You didn't use the n word... And I am not a huge fan of cheating spouses... But I will NEVER look at a wooden spoon the same way ever again...
this is some of the worst and most contrived story writing I have seen... This is just awful on so many levels. I hope not to see any of your work in the future.
Degenerate CuckBoys and cheating WHORE wife Apologists, limp dick writers are crying in their bedrooms closets ... LOL!!!
Satire - Yes it was definitely satire. But Humour? ...Not so much. And any good? Not really. What exactly was the point of this?
2*
the only thing over-the-top, was the combo. i'v sadly seen every single silly thing here, in the LW section. just not all at once!
need's to go into politics. The potential,,,this would make a great movie!
Geez! Talk about going overboard. Everything was so obvious. I suppose this was written as humor. 16 - 25 inch cocks! Ha ha. That's absurd, they all would be in the record books.
was written as a humorous story?
Sometimes people stagger me, they really do.
Oh, yes. 5* for the festival of cliches. Very funny and nicely done.
At the reading and comprehension levels of some readers. Misspelling juvenile while complaining the author is guilty of it, really is juvenile. Moaning that it isn't realistic is pointlessly bad-humoured and illustrates incomprehension. And complaining that characterisation in the story changes when it shouldn't is almost beyond understanding. That was the very point!
From almost the first words, this was a very funny and completely ironic, self-flagellating swipe at the LW genre with it's beloved cliches and tropes. Of course, it's a self-limiting genre in its need for someone to cheat and someone else to discover it, but any genre that can't stand up to a good, healthy dose of irony, doesn't deserve its status.
If you can't stand up to satire, you don't deserve to burn-the-bitch.
Well done, sir.
(An extra star for the wooden spoons. May this become a trope of its own!)
Racist crap by an obviously deficient wimp, and story is totally stupid.
That was a lot of cliches to get through, kudos to the author for fitting them all in.
i think i get what the author was trying to do, but the writing was just bad.
Good politically incorrect humor and a just outcome. Hell, just look at the responses from the RAAC cucky boys. A shame to have their thongs so bunched up....
Really stupid and if 16 to 24 inch cocks didn't give you a hint then your dumber than a bag of barber hair.
I like to read a good, well written story, but this is just awful. The use of 'dialog' attributed to black, is just as dumb as a box of rocks. You need a LOT of help.
Any story by a white attempting to mimic any conversation by a non-white is almost always doomed to failure, and this is no exception. Story is really stupid, presenting nothing but old uninteresting motifs like black opps. Sorry to have wasted my time reading this.
I guess a lot of people missed out on the obvious parody of the typical white wife goes black and crazy story?