by Mr. Marvel
It will be interesting to see how this ties back to the original story. Good work and can't wait until the next chapter.
I like your writing style, very descriptive, you're able to paint the image of the scene in my mind. Can't wait for the next installment.
sorta drasticly diff from previous stories in this series.... hope it links up to the previous stories... Is this a possible mistake?
ok u just fucked me up..what the hell did that have to do with the rest of the story..i thought i clicked on a whole another story...on to the next chapter
Talk about going out to left field. I hope this chapter fits in somewhere in this story.