All Comments on 'Girl Power Ch. 02'

Yes please, I can't wait to read more from you! You're an amazing writer and I think the story should continue!

Gretchen and Morgan, definitely develop their relationship please.

Please continue this serie, as You're one of the best writers here.

Love it-Keep the story going

I came really hard and you are responsible for it. Do you feel like Gretchen? ;)

Write More! You really got me with this story. The sex scenes are amazing. I need more!

Very well written......definitely continue the saga.

Read both parts together. Well written, erotic and believable. You should probably change 'ravished' to 'famished' though I liked the idea. Same for naturist and naturalist.

More please.

...please write more.

Loving this story! Thank you for sharing. However, in the middle of Page 3 of this chapter, your characters change names for a couple paragraphs. Might want to fix that.

Loved the 2nd story just as much as the 1st.

Please continue writing about the college girl(s) I wish I had know when I went to college.

Terrific installment on this story. One of the best new authors on Literotica!

Your autobiographical comments are enlightening. Whatever issues you're working through IRL, I am grateful to be a beneficiary of your literary talents. Your descriptions are both provocative and evocative. For instance, your creation of the Founders Day festivities as a pivot point in Morgan's story showed exceptional skill in plot development. Your language is both competent (correct) and transparent (doesn't draw attention to itself).

In my estimation you deserve a 5 on both installments in this series. Be advised that the most accomplished writers on this site work out the entire series -- at least in outline form, but ideally the whole text -- before posting the first chapter.

hey, pls continue the story thru, read both your parts together and are very good! Narration is excellent, gripping & story flow is good.

Wish to read more of you!

I love how smoothly the story progresses. Waiting for moar

You might want to tag Non-Consent/Rape on this, based on that last sexual encounter.

Not trying to be a ball buster. It's just unexpected to go from reluctance but willing in part 1 and the rest of this story and then have it flip to a "rape you until you like it enough to consent" at the end.

Keep up the good writing

I agree with the others. Very good plot and flow. You don't rush the climax. Exhibition is great, as is having an innocent character.

Please!

Wonderful story and very well-written. Please do continue it and thank you for writing and sharing it with us.

please keep going!+++

Love the story so far please continue.

I liked all the characters and would love to see more of Jacob.

Love the story, keep the chapters coming please!

keep it coming, I really liked Gretchen and Morgan.. not so much the boys but I'm curious for the rest of the story..

i only gave you five stars because o couldn't give you 10. this is one of, if not the #!, stories i have read here in my short few months here.

it was exceptionally well written. & i don't use the word "exceptionally" very often.

yes, please continue with this story. it has come so far so quickly, & there's the potential of so much more.

These stories are extraordinary, and I am aching to have the relationship with Janelle develop further.

Please please continue the story!! No matter what you do I'm sure I'll love it like I did these last two

i hope you continue!!

Thanks for taking the time to share you mind with us! Even better than the first one! Can't wait for more! PLEASE!

Waiting for the next one!!!

They just keep getting better. I can't wait to read what happens next!!

That was a very compelling story. If love to read more!

Please please please keep these coming!

Wish I would've met Gretchen when I was going to college! She sounds like 'my kind of women! My nic sez it all!....lol! Please don't stop, Im looking forward to more in this series!

Cummsgreat responsibility, to help others with need of tefe own. Moran is one example, with her now found releasd she now has the ability to shine. Eli and Zeke are to more examples enjoying her power to show womensome respect and then rock your world.

Thanks for continuing the storie.

Such a tender way to initiate a naive roommate into the joy of sex, Gretchen has really been very gentle exposing the sheltered world of Morgan and the love making was well written and hot. Absolutely fab more power to your 'pen'

there is only one problem that i see with your story. we need a better grading system than just a five star rating. your story deserves better than a five rating, much more. at least that is my opinion. bob

really awesome storytelling... well plotted stories and teasingly wonderful reading

You havé à very nice way at telling your story.

Please go on!

I was the naive girl in college. It made me v wet reading it. You have a beautiful way of putting telling it.

Awesome story. Well rounded characters (no pun intended) and great storytelling!

Definitely more... keep it cumming!

Amazing, you must have a wonderful life

I loved chapter two the second time around as much as I did chapter one. Really solid characters and good dialogue. The pace is perfect and guaranteed to make any reader hard or wet.

I thought this was extremely well written. I loved the build up, the dialogue, and the character development. Very well done.

I feel she was too forceful to Meagan. If this were a guy forcing himself onto a girl, it would be considered date rape by many. If Meagan didn't relent and want it sooner, then it should have stopped. And nowhere in the tags does it say anything about Nonconsent/Reluctance. Properly tag and classify your story.

Your work Iis top drawer. It is fantasy but also very realistic. Remarkable piece of work. Men are usually too functional and women too romantic or obsessed with minor feminist points. Excellent!

Good writing, but a little too close to rape for my tastes. Morgan kept saying “no”, and Gretchen kept pushing on. I also had trouble with Gretchen’s disdain for Morgan’s Catholicism. Making her Catholic wasn’t really necessary to your plot— any conservative background would do, and in any case, it wasn’t particularly accurate regarding Amarican Catholicism, which tends to be far less rigid than Evangelical Protestantism.

Old prejudices die hard, and in the US, that’s a very old prejudice indeed.

It was awesome plzz keep writing

so many good things to say. Gretchen and Morgan are well-drawn characters and the author pulls off the difficult trick, through a combination of dialogue and character development, of making former's seduction of the latter slow enough to feel realistic but not so slow as to be dull. I look forward to reading more of the adventures of these two and their friends.

you pull off that rare combination of strong character development and reasonable story length. I can't wait to read more!

why do you keep describing your poc character as "exotic" that's so fucking weird

More more more, it's all so beautiful...

Unbelievable !!! Loved it. I’ve only read up to part two but you need to write a chapter4.