by MsViolent
I really appreciate when there is a bit of inner dilemma, with the main character. I hope to feel it even more in the second chapter. Will she resist or give into her primal urges?
Well done.
You write perfectly... But why did you stop at the best part? Both sex and storywise...
I disagree - I think you stop at the perfect moment - Mmmm, got me going / got me thinking and fantasising about what cums (excuse the pun) next - thanks x