All Comments on 'Go Get Em Zoey girl!'

Loved your hot father/daughter story. Good length and plot development. Thanks, hope to read more

Enjoyed your story, but it was a bit hard work with so many spelling mistakes. Please run your next one through a spell-checker.

The story itself was electric and set my nerve endings on fire- so I gave you full marks for that alone. HOWEVER! I noticed a lot of typos and grammatical errors (sentence structure stuff, mostly). In the future PLEASE enlist the aid of a decent editor. Better yet, do what I do:

After each paragraph or page, go back over what you typed and spot-check it for any errors that you find. Do this during the entire writing process. Once the story's done, go back over it with a fine-toothed comb and try to find anything that you may have missed (doing this also allows you the freedom to go back and embellish any sections that you think you might've scrimped on, which can only improve the story).

But, again, the overall story was hot as hell and kept my attention. Hell, I've even favorited it, which is something that I RARELY do. I look forward to seeing more like this from you in the future (with better editing, of course)!

Great stuff. Only saw a few mistakes but they weren't in the meat of the story so it wasn't bad at all. I read right over them. Can't wait for the next one. Is there more to come?

Why? Why do you do this?

"What were the odds," she asked?

Why is the question mark at the end of the sentence instead of the dialog?

The story read so well that I missed most spelling and typo errors until I read it a second time. The plot and story was very hot and had me very excited.

good thing they didn't know about the Motion Activated Cameras that had recently been installed at the Club House 8~P, hee-hee. I got it all.

But seriously; thsee two are so frigg'n delicious

No clue yet as to why mom isn't putting out!! Hmmmmm thought maybe she'd get caught in a compromising situation and cause a divorce.

Thx;

DKP

...and not enough fucking, for my liking. But it's a good, sexy tail nonetheless.

...not tail.

what a great story. 5 stars. i know you haven't written in a while - i hope you post something soon - you're one of the best on this site!