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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Ha ha ha!

That was priceless ending to an amusing story.

AlitheAlitheover 14 years ago
Nice

Funny ending. Let's hope it was rather dark in there.

brian473317brian473317over 14 years agoAuthor
Is It Non-Consent Or Not?

I've received some comments that this story is in the wrong section. I disagree for the following reasons.

Brenda is the victim of her claustrophobia and despite her dislike of Jason, she is forced to have sex with him to take her mind off of her fear.

Jason is coerced into having sex with Brenda despite the fact that he doesn't like her much, except for the way she looks.

So, both parties are having sex against their wills. It's not rape or blackmail, but it is still not of their choosing.

GiglioGiglioover 14 years ago
Remarkably similar...

<br>... to a story I wrote, LOL. Not that I'm accusing you of plagiarism, honest. There are, after all, only so many things that can happen in a lift. And maybe yours had got a better backstory than mine. :)</br>

<br>But I'm not sure that non-con was the right place to put this. Erotic couplings would probably have worked better. It wasn't as though either of them were particularly unwillng now, was it?</br>

<br>Thanks for sharing.</br>

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
WHAT I LIKED

...is that a controlling bitch met a MAN she realized she could not manipulate.

And he adamantly refused to kowtow to a ballbuster even for sex,

but nevertheless got sex with her anyway.

Although more than one category could be appropriate, it does fit the "reluctance" part of Nonconsent/Reluctance.

She was was reluctant for over an hour to have the sex she needed because she could not make him her patsy.

He was reluctant to have sex with a fuckable woman who demanded it like a shrew, until she would denigrate herself to humbly beg for it.

Well-written storytelling I've come to expect from brian473317.

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Paul in Oklahoma

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I've been writing short stories and full length novels for several years. As a professional ISO auditor and consultant I create technical documents such as standard operating procedures and health and safety best practice sheets. It is in my spare time that I write fiction, ...

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