by j2586tx
The proponent is single vis a vis mature married women-should have been in Erotic Coupling.
I suspect this was written in a rush and the author accomplished precisely what he wanted. In terms of a complete seduction saga, one or two addition flirtatious meet and greets would have set the stage nicely.
Perhaps a quick sketch of the absent Mr. Wilson & why she's so down on him, outside his dig at her weight gain. That wasn't a very smart diss on his part, when this woman is carrying his baby. The pregnancy plot wrinkle was a nice break from norm.
I'm not a fan of cheaters per se, but the writing had definite flashes of subversive quality and that has charm. This writer could carve out a niche in DamonX or Scouries scamp-ish stud territory, if he works on his literary skills half as hard as his narrators do on their abs.
Loved it! As soon as you post a story with a wayward wife, the prudes come out in force. They must be up all night looking to be be the first one to pounce. A bit ironic, morals on a porn site, huh?
Anyway, keep it up. Your work is appreciated.
just the fact that it was a shit story that was more about teenage fantasy and fetish than loving wife.
Hmm. wouldn't a more accurate definition of "naysayers" be jackasses who hate people having a different opinion than theirs? You'd be near the top of the list.
Please continue. Interesting story. At the very least you made a lot of people express an opinion.
Loved it...hot woman, big tits, crazy sex driven to even pee and she's pregnant! You captured many of my favorite things and then some! I hope chapter 2 includes her in spike heels and hot anal! Keep working it!
This one reads like it was written by a 10 year old.
I have had this as a recurring wet dream ... Very hot and effective! However, I knew I was dreaming as it progressed, each time! Maybe I should start submitting my dreams ... Nah!
Love the story, got a little weird with the golden shower part but worked in well with the character,also would have like to know why she was off her husband, but other than that great story can't wait for the second chapter
There must be a contest going on of who can write the dumbest stories. Hell of a start for this week. Notice, most are new writers. That's what we needed more trash writers.
I thought it was a good first effort. However, I'm slightly traumatized by the golden shower and since I'm afraid that his "surprise" will be that he will have to eat her husband's cum from inside her, I will not continue. Please don't be put off by it. That's just my personal choice, but I'm sure that someone else loves this kind of kink.
There will be negative people and you can't please everyone all of the time. Keep at it and you'll have no choice but to get better.
This site needs a junk filter cuz this one would have plugged it for sure. Come on man, you're giving erotic writing a bad name. Zero stars if they had it.
What every young man dreams of, yet coming true. Great start I hope there are more tales from the week to CUM?
There is nothing more beautiful than a pregnant woman, one who is not afraid to show her sexuality, one who still wants to get fucked.
What a hot story. Now finish it.
You're a sad degenerated pimple on the ass of a rat!!! Try to write w/o caps, no one is impressed by your yelling and bitching! I gave this a 5
The golden shower part was definitely a "surprise". I know this isn't a site for clean stuff, but that is where I draw the line. It is literally a waste product of your body, stop that.