All Comments on 'Good Girl Pt. 01'

Awesome! This needs to continue!

A bit hard to believe at times. Bringing her back to his house which is next door for the night is just asking for trouble. Then again it may facilitate what will be the most interesting part of the story, that being what Sam will do when her suspicions are confirmed.

1. Get an editor, this is full of errors.

2. Pick ONE tense - past or present - and stick with it! [HINT: Only very, very skilled writers can develop a story in present tense.]

3. Way too much “thinking”. Don’t TELL us what’s on their mind. SHOW us.

Ok how the fuck would he not realize he’s inside her

Fuuuu-uuuck! That was hot.

Thank you everybody for your comments. They're all appreciated. I haven taken your feedback into consideration and I like to think it'll pay off in parts 3-5.