All Comments on 'Goodbye to the Past Pt. 03'

Got confused when a name change occurred between pages 2 and 3, and Bonnie became Gina, e.g. 'Gina smiled at Frank and mouthed silently.' Needed some judicious editing. Happened in an earlier chapter when a 'Steven' suddenly appeared. Despite that (these things happen) I really like the development of the relationships. Perhaps it's time for Caitlin to be on a mission to seduce and bring into the fold some new people? Nice bit of anal at the end of this chapter. Can't wait to see how that develops.

Yeah, I've read every story I've written a hundred times but still find bloopers like those. In 'Beth's Summer Break', Mike suddenly becomes Mick for a while. Hate finding them, but they're always there.

Ah well, I've found errors in work by people who get paid for doing this thing for a living, so I'm in good company!