All Comments on 'Grief'

...and it still brought tears out.

Very poignant, Well done.

One of the best stories on the site.

A true talent in writing. Gripped from the beginning. So heartwrenching but a loving finish. Very well done

This one brought tears with the reminder that you never "get over it"...but that there is hope you just might one day "learn to live with it!"

I read this story for the second time a few minutes ago

I had to wait until I could see the screen to write about your story

The emotions really got to me

I would love to see this made into a film

You are a brilliant writer please keep writing

Peter

This story Tore me up,. Grief is right you have nothing but pain , no end in sight no getting better , no rest , my wife has had Breast cancer twice now , and while she,s still fighting the fight she is with me still, and while I still love her our lives will never be the same again , Love your writing wish some of your stories were longer, just because they are so good,. thank you for that..

What a great story, as well as masterful editing. Thank you so much for this gem! :)

I certainly can't imagine what would be. This is my second reading and i sit here trying to type on my phone through my tears. My Gods what a talent...

I can only imagine the hurt from losing a child. Well told story thanks....

I think that I got something in my eye while reading your Wonderful and Amazing Story!

Me, I'd of divorced her soon after Rachel died.

I usually ramble on in my comments. Not this time

I'm shattered.

This was very sensitively written, with a lot of empathy, about very real feelings, which is why the sex scene after the death was very discordant. (I can work the word "very" in a few more times if you would like.) I know this is Literotica, but come on! The whole story was about emotional truth, and it would have fit the story better if there was a brief description of consolation and reuniting sex rather than the explicit sex scene that was used. I was tempted to drop the score to 4* (wish I could use half-stars sometimes) but the overall quality kept my vote at 5*.

This is a very respectful description of realistic life's lows and ups. It was coherent and believeable. From personal experience I can tell you that words can KILL a relationship as deeply as actions.

Tolstoy said that "time and patience are the greatest warriors."

The best story I have read in a while. Truly touching. Keep up writing such gems. This story will inspire many writers to write gems.

Thought it was going to be breaking up and second marriages etc

But so well written

I came back toughed it out and

Cried

Son of a bitch

Outstanding

Come on. Old guys aren’t supposed to cry over a story. Beautifully sculpted and told. I just launched a few stories of my own and now I feel so inadequate as a writer. Five stars are too few to tell you how much I loved this tale and how they did come together. If they broke up anyway, I don’t think I could have taken it.

Thanks for sharing your talents.

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Very well done, except it needs a little TLC on the editing. I imagine the author might have trusted auto-correction a bit too much. Some very odd word-choices here and there as if the auto-correction chose the wrong ones.

The description of their lives during Rachel's disease was very good, very emotive, and conveyed just the kind of feelings that I think that parents in that situation might have.

I agree with "Anonymous 08/07/19" though, the post-funeral sex scene was gratuitous, that bit would have benefited from being implied. The whole reconciliation was a little too sudden also.

These are just minor quibbles though, on a whole this was really good.

Holy crap. I'm a grown man with tears in his eyes at 4am because I can't stop reading your stories. Really amazing.

Very profound. I have no other words for this.

Well told powerful story!!!!

Thought i was passed tears..

Now that was a story .

Hope you are ready to cry

BEAUTIFUL STORY!!this is all I can say...

What an emotional story. Maybe the best I ever read on Literotica.

I read this story a long time ago.

Every time I see it's link posted, i skip it.

I skip it because i remember it's emotional impact.

I prefer to read for light entertainment.

But...I fell into it's trap and read it again. Darn it!

Just as great; just as emotional as i remember it.

Darn you Oshaw!

Samson

Thank you for this story I've had my share over the years Babies and then we were granted two that lived and are adults now with childern of their own . And after 28 years my wife passed away . At 75 years of age i do understand what Grief can do...

We had been together since she was 15 and me 16 a total of 67 yrs, married for 60 of them when she past away, I wear the 18 ct gold wedding ring that I bought on the 3rd of my finger of my of my left hand in her .memory, The cost 12£ . 14 s . 00 d in context 3 weeks wages just under in 1955. (as a GPO telephone engineer.) She will never be out of my thoughts. I've now got tears in my eyes now.

Oh! It's just my heart that you ripped out.

That was one heart wrenching story wonderfully told.

this brings back the loss of a 5 1/2 yr old niece , a brother at 50 ,a sister at 48 & my wife a7 66, most of the time it doesn't hit so bad except at their birthday& Christmas & today being 12/22/2019

That will make your heart pound, And your eyes leak.

Enough said

Ah-hell , I'll write something when I stop crying , then again there is nothing more that needs saying .

Wow

... Loved it though. Still crying. Five stars.

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Average: 4.81

enough to have rain in the house . between my late . & myself we lost 5 she lost 2 with her ex-husband , I lost 2 with an ex wife & both lost 1 together . see too many so called parents who shouldn't have children.

Ok you win favorite story

Tears and blow nose

It's all good

Easily one of the very best on this site.

OMG I’m in tears, bucket loads.

I, too, am crying and so enjoyed this story. It played out like a movie. Please keep them coming! Thank you!

I enjoyed the story a lot but almost gave up reading when stuck in the huge backstory that added nothing to me.

Beautifully done. The backstory could have been emphasized less, more focused on critical events, but not worth complaining about.

Beautiful, bittersweet story. I feel sorry for Karen and John. Most especially John.

loved this story just goes to show it's not all about the sex

This story brought back painful memories having been in this position. It was beautifully written as it showed the emotions that only unfortunate parents like me have been in. It is a good insight into how a couple struggle with the death of a child and the aftermath (even to the balloons. That's when the tears started lol). And the age of the child is immaterial. It is true to life and that is why it deserves 10 stars. Unfortunately most marriages do not survive so I am so glad it had a happy ending

Thrid time, same tears,,, 😢

Tears again..

I can see how the death of a child could tear a couple apart from grief...

Great story. It is very true that emotions get out of hand in these situations. Eventually the stress brings people closer together or destroys them.

We do strange things in these type of situations. So happy that they found there way back. Thanks!

Gawd I luv happy endings .....🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗 ...

One of my all time favorites. I always get misty at the end, even knowing what's coming.

I also recommend laptopwriter's "Continental Divide."

man that's messed up, you let an innocent/sweet child die

but I get it

excellent story..

I cried.

back in 1973 lost a 5 &1/2 yr old niece to GBA they didn't have a name for it back then. reading this again brings back memories from way back then along with rains showers inside.

I enjoyed this story, but I Agree with other comments that he should have divorced her. Times got tough and she showed her true colors. He deserves better than a sniping backstabbing bitch.

I read this story after it was mentioned as a comparison in a comment to my latest offering. I'm glad for the suggestion, because this actually made my day.

I almost didn't read it because I first began by checking the comments, many of which are less-than-glowing, such as, "He should have divorced the back-stabbing bitch."

I despise statements like that. I felt every pull and temptation you painted in these characters. They were both guilty, and both innocent. That's how it happens.

I also truly liked your proposition that hatred isn't the opposite of love, indifference is. Such a marvelous observation.

Like I said, it's all too real.

My only criticism: Your carefully-chosen words and use of phrasing are both phenomenal, but you tend to over-use commas and under-use other punctuation, particularly in dialogue.

I give this a rock-solid five stars without hesitation because it's the story that counts, not the mechanics!

I have probably read every story in the Loving Wives Hall of Fame and this is without a doubt my favorite. Our son passed away very early and this story brought me back to him as we journey back to see him each September, in Killeen, Texas every year.

Perfect!!!!

made me cry.

Really good and even realistic.

The most emotional story I've read ever. I was expecting something else as I've read your other stories and this just hit me like a truck. It had me in tears.

You got it right. Perfect I wish mine turned out as good.

Thank you

It hit me like a train and left me crying and laughing. Just an amazing story.

This hit me like a train - but it wasn't as bad as the World War 2 tank that mauled me in the form of 'Think of Laura' by Slirpuff which also involved a death.

Thanks for this and my sympathy to anybody who goes through anything similar. I vow to help anybody I can that I know having read this. It hit me hard.

A very moving story with a wonderful ending. Thank you.

I have been reading stories here for a number of years, but this is the first time I have ever left a comment. I have had tears before, but never crying. I am a 59 year old father of 4 now adult kids, 2 each from my 2 marriages (7 and now 27 years each). When asked as I grew up what I wanted to be, I always said a dad. I discovered a few years back (well into my second marriage) that I needed to be a husband first and foremost. Due to all the lingering actions and in-actions, I do not believe this marriage will last much later. I can only say thank you for a story that keeps reminding me what is important, wishing more (mostly) happy endings would happen in this world. With your abilities, I wish you were still writing these (assumption based on your posting dates).

And time ticked away. (Page 4)

You certainly drew this story out and I found myself agreeing and chuckling as I read this line. However, it all made sense as to why when pages 5 and 6 brought us to a wonderful conclusion to your story.

Thank you.

Something in my eye.

My vote is in for this being the best story on this webpage. Truly beautiful.

...with something for everyone. It was well written, generally, with an appropriate ending. Four stars.

Far too long a story.As for the outcome,that should not have happened.After she appeared on TV with John he should have divorced her.

Cutting onions around here.

Beautiful, a few tears may have escaped, I blame the ninjas and their onion chopping

I have a few "All-Time Favorites," and this is definitely one of them. As many times I have read this, I always get misty at the end.

I read the story for the second time. This was a 5*. Despite some editing failures, the story was well-written and totally realistic. The story could have turned multiple ways, such as when Marylin and John did the TV incident without even talking to Ray. But Ray and Marilyn stayed for Rachel and that was the only human option. The post-funeral reconciliation was somewhat abrupt but it was appropriate under the circumstances. Both were truly at fault for not making the marriage work, and, although each had cheated on the other emotionally, neither had reached the adultery stage.

A good story.

I, like most others, can not fully comprehend the heartache and stress this described time could be endured by mom and dad.

Sad but excellent rendition of family life involving a small child living through cancer.

Second time of reading this and the poignancy just jumps out at you. An absolutely beautiful story of love battered by another emotional wave but eventually resurfacing stronger than ever, but what a journey.

A beautiful story.

Thank you.

Tears from your story. So sad about their child, then the falling apart of the relationship because of the stress caused by the child's sickness. Good to read a Loving Wives story where everyone remained faithful to their marriage vows. Thank you for a wonderfully mushy, tearful, love story.

A beautifully sad tale. tears for all.

I am not supposed to feel like this after reading a lit. story. All my emotions have gone through the mixer. A beautifully written story, I am so happy that they both resisted cheating on the other and that they ended up madly in love again any other ending would have destroyed me. What a great author, if only I could have given 20*

I just read the story for a second time and it was really moving and I eventually remembered parts of it. True love and marriage takes a lot of work, negotiating and forgiving of minor differences! Thanks for this story!

Baton Rouge Cajun Guy

lost my niece Eddie at 5 & 1/2 yrs young to a brain cancer they didn't a name for in the 70's. they have a name that's 13 letters long. she would have been 50 yrs now.

This story was a heart breaking, gut wrencher, for sure. It really tugged at my heart. Sometimes, we are so totally engrossed in making our way through life, we forget how fragile it is. I would have given it 11 stars.... thank you

...had me crying all over again.

I cannot stress how incredibly good this story is.

5-million stars & Favorite

They had an Angel indeed...my eye's are wet

very sad. but also best story on here.

Tears in my eyes fall when I read this story. Very emotional.

Thank you.

Read it 3times and the end still gets me...fantastic story :)

I am at reading this ending and tears are falling that ending really got me

How dare you make a grown man cry with this heart tearing story. Every parents worst nightmare wrapped with a bittersweet but beautiful ending.

, wonderful story! Wiping tears as I write this! Truly a love story for the ages! Thank You!

One of the most emotional story of literotica. Loved it..

What a terrible story, (not really), the second time I have read it and more emotionally affected than the first time. They almost lost each other thru the mutual grief and worry about their daughter.

The story was very moving and brings tears and thoughts of my loss, my wife after being together for 40 years. At times I grieve like it was yesterday but its been well over a year and I feel the loss more now than I did last year. I'm not sure the sense of loss, that hole this couple talked, will ever get smaller. Keep writing this was a moving and excellent story.

... I'm a grown-ass man and I have tears running down my face right now. That is the most emotional story I have ever read on Literotica. You are too damned good.

3rd or 4th, it still touches me 100 %. Thank you again

Though I haven't read everything here, none the less Oshaw is the best writer here. 'Nuff said...