All Comments on 'Guest Services'

Yep. You can write!

Smoking hot, beautifully paced, and vividly told. Six, if there was one.

Hmm, nice story, wrong category. 30 and 40 are nowhere near the age of mature. This would have been better off in the erotic couplings category. But then that's just the opinion of an old duffer who actually fits into the mature category.

Beautifully written.I could not help thinki g of a lady friend of 40 years and wikshibng that I could be her Tyler.

Thank you ma'am!

I loved your first story, The Guest Room and this one did not disappoint. When I read the beginning, about the blind-sighted divorce, I wasn’t sure I was going to finish the story. I put the story down and busied myself with daily things. I picked it up a bit later and decided to push through. I’m very glad I did. Well written, excellent premise and the character development pleasing. Well done! Finn

Very nice! You are off to a great start!

Excellent piece of writing, most enjoyable

Great story, love the feel good factor of this tale.

So very nicely done....thank you for a GREAT read and a good plot--with some room for "growth" in the future...(skiing?)

Very sweet ;-)

Predictable. Repetitive. Not overly erotic

Nicely done. Good character development along with a good story line and some hot sex. Thanks…

Well done !!

so lovely story try to make part 2

Really a great read. Keep these amazing stories coming!

Lily,

I'd put this on a list of 'must-reads' for good, solid erotica that trots out a woman's fantasy. The characters come off as real and the situation is completely plausible, and a good fantasy space. If you were writing this as a romance I would expect more doubt and hesitation from Julie about Tyler being a 'player' who just wants to use a lonely older woman. If you read my essay "How NOT To Fuck" you know my prejudice against guys calling women 'Baby'. For me, that labels the guy as a user. Call her 'baby' and you don't have to rmember her name. But I think I can get my mind around the fantasy a woman would have of having a hot 'pushy' guy just taking what he wanted, especially if he did it because she got him out of control. But perhaps you'll play with another story where the relationship is more hesitant and even the hook-up has a go-no go aspect. I imagine you would do it well. Thanks for making fine words. Largo

Good all around but the sex scenes were especially HOTT! And not too drawn out!

A very nice story. The ski lessons at the end was a nice touch!

Great story. I love the hot sex.

Lily,

I would put this story on the 'required reading list' for those writing pure erotic tales. It takes the simple premise of the lonely, angry woman healed by a hot new relationship to a very good place. The setting is simple and Julie and Tyler are quite simpatico. When Tyler first starts coming on to Julie, though she is clearly ready for an encounter, I thought she would push back more and figure he was a 'player' scoring on lonely women. You do address it later but I wondered why she was not more wary at first. You know from "How NOT To Fuck" that I have a problem with men calling women 'Baby', like they don't have to remember the woman's name, and feel free to treat her like a child. It seems to signal that they are one of the 'Doit and Leavit brothers.' But I think you taught me that such a man can be an exciting fantasy; someone who knows what he wants and takes full responsibility for the encounter. Still, I would love to see you explore a more push-pull relationship, even in the sex, where reluctance yields to empowered willingness. Fine reading. Largo

Great work. I love the prickly dialogue and the general setup. Minor editorial - I don’t think their juices would be mingling when he’s got a condom on.

That’s two great stories to start with, Lily. Keep it up! (Um, at least, you’re having that effect…)

What a fantastic story. So glad I stumbled across it. Looking forward to more offerings.

Some of the absolute best erotic writing that I've read on this forum!!! Plus a really fun story, with likeable characters, great sex, and an old fashioned "happy ending"... I am now going to check for other stories by LilyWaters!!

My husband sent me this story almost a month ago and I can’t get enough of it. Lily Waters, you have written a story that matches one of my deepest fantasies. Any woman of my age, and my age shall remain a secret, who says she has never thought about being with a young stranger on vacation is lying. This story has given me many joyful nights of self pleasure. My husband and I have incorporated the story into our role playing on more than one occasion, except the man in the story became a much younger lifeguard.

You managed to fit so much into a relatively short story. I'm swooning. Hot as fuck, obviously. But also with the right amount of humor and romance. And without shoving in the clunky annoying too-specific details like cup size or penis length.

Honestly, a perfect story. Keep writing, you're amazing at it.

Awesome story Lily Waters! You have a new fan!

Since Tyler had little wiry hairs on his thighs and legs, I was thinking he might have the same dark blonde wiry hairs across his chest and abs, and maybe on his arms -- in other words, hair in all the right places. Consider that added description in a future chapter. Tyler is a very sexy young man!

"Loon Lodge" is a perfect description of Hell. This was a very funny story, with lots of great real life detail.

Beautifully written!!

Very nice story. Perfect blend of realism, humor, and perfectly described hot sex.

Very excellent, something I had to finish rather than get on with real life. Five stars!

Great story Brilliantly written! Perfect story development pulling us readers right in, and the amazing raging hot sex so perfectly described. This story screams of needing a sequel. Again great work Lily! Now one of my fav authors.

I have just finished my second reading of your brilliant story. It’s erotic and so much fun. As a former ski instructor, I’d really love to know if Lily learns to ski. Keep up the good work!

Great Story!

Great story and very well written! 10 stars! I’ll be reading the rest of your stories and looking for future writings from you.

Beautifully written. So descriptive and erotic. The kind of sex and intimacy one dreams of