All Comments on 'Halftime'

I dearly love your stories. They draw me in and make me think that Anything is Possible. I was on the verge of tears with this one🙂 please continue to write I love all your stories. Thank you

This transformation story has me all full of butterflies and happiness.

Great story hope you will keep on writing Halftime girl and I love happy endings.

Great story, truly loved it, well written and well thought out, would give it 10 stars if I could

Well, that was different. I liked it.

Great story, really a great romance story and I loved it. About the only criticism I could give is the timeline is so compressed and Ricki never doubts herself, it just kind of flies through,same way with the clinic she goes to ( not to mention she would likely need blood work done). Then again this is a HEA story,so what the heck:)

You are a very good writer!!!! Only a couple of small things you used now when you met know. Spell check won’t catch that. But overall I really enjoy your stories!!

The very best I have ever read,you are truly talented x

Just read your story again,totally brilliant,I cried a lot during my reading,great characters,I am envious of Ricki,such a lucky girl,I look forward to reading all your other stories

I have rarely commented on author's stories here but I have to for this story. I've read this story and your other story "Mary Janes" and you are an incredible story teller. You bring your characters to life and draw the reader in to the world you're weaving. Very well done! I think you've recognized that the chief mission of an author is to entertain and engage the reader. Some have commented that you've glossed over the details a bit, but a story isn't a how-to manual. It's entertainment with just enough fact to be believable. You can actually overwhelm and cause a reader to disengage if you bury them in the details.

Enjoyed! Loved reading it slowly as if watching a movie, twice. Yes, loved it!

Loved this story! You had me in tears!

I have rarely commented on stories here, but after reading Halftime, how could I not tell you what a wonderful, compelling, caring, and loving story you wove. Your characters were likeable and the challenges Ricki faced were overcome not by herself, but with the love and support of others - which is so very true of any challenge in life. Thank you for taking the time to start with a blank page and give us a story that is so very touching. Thank you for the time you took out of your life - and I know it takes time - to create a story that flows as well as Halftime. Now, I am going to read more of your work.

You’re a great writer. Please try to do a longer series. I would love to read it.

@ShelbyDawn, if you keep writing stories like that, I’m going to have to buy stock in Kleenex. And change panties a lot more often.😁

Great character development and sad in some ways that seems so real. 😢. But I always love your happy endings. 🥰

Could clean up some grammar and spelling, though.

Regardless, 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

I have never cried as much reading a story as much as I have reading this one. Absolutely beautiful is all I can say.

une histoire magnifique qui m'a remuée totalement l'intérieure...

j'ai adorée votre écriture, votre prose cette histoire qui semble si réelle..

Un peu de ma vie sans l'être totalement..

vite une autre histoire aussi bien construite et écrite.. vous avez un don..

Great story! It had a little bit of everything in it love heart break romance. The story hit all the right notes for me.

Great story loved it all!

Beautiful story and so well constructed and written. Just a little long on the romance for me because I like a little more grit and conflict but there’s no denying a good love story when you find one. I’ll deff read more of your stories. L O R

I absolutely loved this story! Well written. I couldn't stop reading. The characters were developed to empathize and relate to. I need to go back and read your other stories. I can't wait to read more of your work.

Almost made me cry loved it good work. P.S made me leak a little too thanks. I started reading this as Tom but had to finish as Tammy. like her better anyway.

Excellent story! I was legitimately crying by the end. It was so beautiful!

OMG! This story is SO beautiful. When I got to the part before the wedding, I had to readonly a half of a paragraph at a time, so I wouldn't start crying hard. You see, I was reading it at work, so it would be a bit awkward 😝 But when I got to Victor proposing, I couldn't keep it in. I would love so.much to be a part of a story like this. Especially if it would be MY story. Can't wait to read more of your stories.

Fantastic coming out story luv.

Definitely kept me wanting more.

Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading more from you.

Great story and well written

I truly have enjoyed this and all of your stories I have read. Please continue to write more, or expand on those you have written already.

Thank you for a very well written and enjoyable story, one of the best I've read in awhile. Kudos!!

I dont usually keep reading after I cum lol. I welled up a couple times too. This story was absolutely beautiful

Such a lovely story.

Thanks for giving us such a lovely, heart warming tale.

Well written, captivating, heartwarming and wonderful

What is great story, I 💕💕💕 both main characters.

This is really a nicely done piece. It spans a bunch of very real, very human emotions and it does it very well. Thank you for sharing your writing skills with us.

doug

Accepting my sexuality as Bi after all these years, I would love to have fallen in love with Ricki.

Nice story with enough sex, emotions, and details to keep you in the story.

Thank you for writing it.

Stop making me cry lol

@Anonymous,

"Stop making me cry lol"

That's probably my favorite comment ever on any of my stories. No promises, though...

Great story really enjoyed it! Beautifully written. Thx for sharing x

Really perfect, everything was great and really keeps you reading and wanting more. Great job with this.

Once again the commenters have expressed my feelings for your work. You are gifted.

A wonderful well written story. It pulled at my heartstrings and a few other things.

Good story, It's what I'd do now if I was Twenty. Sadly I'm 53 and it too late But Like the Dali Lama I'm coming back as a hot girl.

Not really a big commenter but this one broke me, I have to say something, I'm typically not a fan of erotic stuff I just scroll looking for gems. Since I've found you I read a few at odds now I'm reading them all your writing is truly magical, and you deserve so much more recognition for your work, keep it up especially the sci-fi stuff that was soo so good your by far my favourite!

Awesome writing !!!

This is the first of your stories I've read and I honestly don't know how I hadn't discovered you sooner. This is an absolutely amazing work, excellent job!!! As a Trans Woman, I definitely identify with alot of the thoughts and feelings of the MC. And just like her I get kinda lost in some of the erotic fiction like "that's a hot story... but yeah, no way in all hell I'd let someone treat me like that." Lol. Refreshing to hear that POV. I can't wait to read your other works, if this is anything to judge by you will soon be one of my new favorite writers. -Tysvm 😘

All I can add is that you have such a way with words to even get a grown man to cry...Thank You and should you wish for a proof reader, all I request for payment is a box of tissues...xx

A veritable emotional roller coaster. Bravo. Peace....

That was simply beautiful.

Your eye for detail is excellent and story telling is great. This story would have benifitted from a longer tell. Ricki’s easy acquiescence is the product of the short tell. I would have enjoyed the slower burn, and I thing the words are there in you. 4 out of five for me.

Wonderful!

MORE! I love all your happy endings. This one with the little twist of melancholy hit pretty close to home. I'd love a part 2 that shows just one of Ricki's origin family coming around and asking forgiveness. I'd like to think my family might come around someday.

My mother knew before I did, and unfortunately when I came out and transitioned, she was already gone to cancer. She was nurse. In honor of her, I went back to school, graduated, and also became a nurse, an oncology nurse. My father would not talk to me when he found out who I've become. As with Ricki's mother, my father's "son was dead to him." Ironically, it was a vicious two months on the Oncology floor at the hospital for me as I was caring for him during his cancer treatment. His verbal abuse towards me, and especially his silence was way more pain than a woman whose career was full of painful moments, along with rare wonderful ones, to bear. On his last day of life, after waiting for my shift to end, and me going into the nurses' lounge for a quick nap, he acknowledged to my coworker that he was proud of his daughter for what she had become. Family. Wow. I miss both parents very much. This was a great story. Thank you.

You've done it again! Another wonderful story! I so love your writing...

Amazing!! If only I had her courage!! And friends!

I cried too many times through the first 2 reads. I will need to read it a 3rd time then maybe I can finally enjoy the story. @shelbydawn57 you are so talented, I love your stories so much. I have been binge reading your catalog for the past few days and each and every time I do, I smile, laugh and cry. I cry more than I laugh but there are always smiles. Thank you for your amazing gift of storytelling. <3

Very intence, romantic, loving story. Woukd you take it futher?

This story Always makes me cry. Damn It!!