All Comments on 'Halloween and Mom'

Looking forward for the sisters joining the fray!

I have just read two of your stories. I really liked them but just have one criticism. Both make a similar leap at the end to announce future participation of the mother or sisters. I realise that this is setting the scene for future chapters and that, with fantasies, the reader is expected to suspend belief a little but I feel these twists need a better introduction, a bit more of a set-up. The appear something of a crude tool to me.

I still really enjoyed the stories though!

Hot but too short.

Fun romp!

That was so very hot and I want more. I knew he was busted when he opened the door and hung the keys.

Good story but it was to short. We did not get mom’s or sister’s names! How about getting Mike some help dealing with 3 females. Maybe an uncle, mom’s brother, or cousins could help and balance things out? Please keep writing and thanks for this story. I’ll be looking forward to part 2. Four stars from me, on a really short story,

DNA

Great story...but why the race to the finish....???

You had a decent setup and the story was moving along nicely, and then you raced to the finish....

Kind of spoiled it...sorry :(

Enjoyed the start. Love a longer story with a bit more build up to introduce the characters. I’m not a writer, would never attempt to write a story anyway. Cant wait for more chapters.

Love the story can't wait for the sisters to join. Will it be at Christmas or when they get home?

good read. Needs expanding

Hope there is more to this story.

GREAT STORY!!!! Fun to read and I enjoyed how it was exciting yet short.

Awesome story. Sure wish my sister was hot 🔥 but mom was the only one I ever wanted.

Not good pacing. Not descriptive enough. Good premise. Bad delivery.

Nice plot, nice pace and exciting development of the coupling.

5*

BJ

[01.12.22]

Fun und Zsexxsi!

11/10!!!!!

This is one lucky family at a very very lucky son and brother This is one man great story hope you can continue it is really great thank you

u need to make ur stories way longer