All Comments on 'Halloween Treat'

Good job very nice story for Halloween.

Sex really is hotter when there is also real romance. Very nice story...but maybe a little hotter if he had punched out Marco. I always got hotter after punching out someone being mean to a woman... Something about those two f... words that go together... :-)

I believe this story had about everything. A little surprised that she still had her V card, but Gabe didn't seem to mind. Well done

Absolutely magnificent!

Well written! Flowed really well, and the characters rang true. Sure wish this happened more in real life. Thank you for the story!

"Other women I'd known would've stripped me off by now, and would already be crawling up body, demanding that we get it on. So I've got to say it was kind of refreshing to see that she was a little shy and this would be something special for her, and obviously she didn't hop into bed with every guy she knew."

Unless you were trying to make Gabe look like an idiot and an asshole for ignoring the fact that she jumped into bed with him on the first not really a date, I'm not sure the slut shaming was a positive addition to the story.

What a lovely story!

It was wonderful seeing it work out for these two. Thanks for the uplifting tale.

Okay, two little silvered haired old Italian noona’s, ahhh how did not you not end the story with a revelation of some Romantic Halloween Magic!? I really enjoyed the story.....

Loved the setting with the two nonnas and written so well. Just thought the scenes involving her father were a little too contrived and too short. Despite his insistence he gave in too soon IMHO. Great story. Well done.

This was such a sweet story!!!!! I absolutely loved it!!!!!

Thoroughly enjoyable read. Loved the two meddling nonnas, all the food, but mostly the wonderful love story. Thanks for sharing.

No other word as perfect !

Gabe is 30yrs yet at the start he's written like a teenager. Was expecting crazy wild hot tempered Italian hands flying all over the place

Wonderful story! I really enjoyed it! 5* for sure.

The only thing that would have made it better was if it was a bit longer. As another poster mentioned, it might have been good if the build-up to asking her out might have been longer. Perhaps they meet the day before and he finally asks her on Halloween morning. Also, the fix-up by the dad could have been drawn out a bit more. Perhaps the creep and his family are there and she has to endure an entire dinner with them. And she can't see Gabe for a couple of days (because he had to go out of town on business?) and the turmoil lasts a bit longer. Perhaps a six page story instead of 4.

OTOH, I know that writing takes time, and when you have a deadline for a contest, sometimes you just need to get the story done.

NOTHING WORSE THAN INTERFERING OLD BITCHES, MORESO WHEN THEY'RE FAMILY

Excellent story. Easy reading great flow. And a father that did not disown her for not doing what he wanted. All in all, a very good ending.

5*, just for nonna Rossi.

She deserves them.

Two interfering old bitch grandmothers

5/5, very nice and well told. Thanks!