All Comments on 'Hannah's Bachelor Party'

Wow this is a super hot story. I love that we get a sense of Hannah's nervousness but willingness to push through that.

This is my first story. Please let me know what I could do differently. Thank you.

Enjoyable story - kept me amused & often hard on a boring day working at a museum.

Thank you all. Please keep the comments coming. I'd love to hear how you all like this. I'm working on the next story.

Wow - a really amazing story. Great work and fun to read. Thanks!

Great example of erotica where everyone has fun. Very little to help you improve I’m afraid as you’ve got it about right. It lacks polish occasionally, but that’s a detail. A few occasions where you could improve flow/readability by avoiding “she said” when it’s obvious who said it, and perhaps in the same readability vein, watch the number of character names on ‘screen’ at one time. Most people don’t have perfect memories or write down who’s who, like an author has to. Thanks

Can't wait to read the next Hannah story

"size B breasts" Really? As soon as I see breasts described by cup size (no man I've known would have any idea about cup size without reading the tag) or penis described in inches I hit the Back button. It's so silly and juvenile to make a point of this.

Interesting story, I enjoyed it. Thanks for writing.

Thanks for that - what superb story!