by gilrenard
Great idea, but the conversation with Shelly and Amber and then with Amber and Gil were very confusing. Only one person should be designated "me".
It did get better (much better) as it went on and became only Amber and Gil. Some odd sentences, but no spelling or grammatical errors that bothered me. So nice job and looking forward to more "Hate Fucks".
The shifting of perspective at the beginning, with no way to distinguish the speaker, was very distracting and it took me right out of the story.