by purefire
This chapter was a little short but still highly enjoyable. Keep them coming!
Since these chapters only come out about once a week, its unreasonable to expect the reader to know who Daniel is, as he was mentioned (I had to go back to find it) only once.. Yes, you fill us in a little later in the chapter, but initially it was very confusing.
You are a awesome writer, I would love getting more than 2 pages from you... its as if, the moment I get deeply involved I am at the end of the story. I feel as if I your watching it on tv. You and Jazcullen are my two favorite authors. Your stories are original , inviting, and addictive! I Love them. Please consider making them longer, just a thought. P
That is one of the things that I like about your stories. It is fun see parts of people that I know...LOL