All Comments on 'Hawaiian Valentines "Lei" for Daddy'

I honestly can't remember the last time I enjoyed a story as much as this one . Thanks

An orgasming centre?Is it a place where sex maniacs are treated?

of good computer space.

you need an editor. 50% for effort.

Yes, Literotica's most popular author has scored another top hit. What a shame if this story doesn't win the contest.

it doesnt get any better than this. more!

I never stop being arroused by a "Scouries Tail"

. . . and not in a good way. Next to BFW you are the worst wannabe writer on this site.

It started warming up when she licked the ice cream off her nipple with daddy watching and then really got steamy. Thanks for a great story, Rebecca.

what took you so long to get to the sex? but hey it was well worth the wait

what took you so long to get to the sex? but hey it was well worth the wait

What are you in real life, anyway, a septic tank cleaner? I wish somebody would shovel this shit story away.

Great story! And yes, the 5 stars do look neat with the new system! Good luck on the contest!

A really great story, I lived in Hawaii for 6 years and have enjoyed most of the places you've described. The characters were well developed, and the story was as lush as the setting. As for your critics, every voice needs a forum, but don't let it stop you from your excellent writings. Thanks for the story from one who can't write, but loves to read. GOOD LUCK in the contest..

I loved this story and can't wait for part 2. There has to be a part 2!! But try to get to the sex a little sooner

I normally don't read long ass stories but this one kept me right there waiting for more and I can't wait for Craig to get there and take his sister!!!!!!!!!!

Them that don't like it can take a long walk off a short pier.

This was good.

It took time but was well written!

I nearly said "could do better",but better than what ,this will do real fine,see the bashers are in full flood.

i just can't wait to hear about the brother.

The only complaint I have is the beginning is a little wordy. Very sexxy and sensual characters and very believable ( that is always the most important part). I could even see myself in her daddy's place becoming lover to a very hot relative. Keep up the good work would love to see a second part with brother and dad in hawaii

The private lessons I gave you sure paid off! You should win the contest, hands down. Yours, Wendy S.

Must continue! Can't wait to see how it all works out.

Not sure what to say but what an amazing story! A new fan, Suzanne.

Why don't you try children's books? Your writing ability reminds me of a five or six-year-old. Perhaps you would be popular with the kindergarten crowd.

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This is a great story. It teases, and it fulfils on its promises. And it made me wet. Quite wet!

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I thought it was just another sex story until it just burst into something bigger. Powerful. Thanks, Aaron (I'm a female)

Well James, I think this could well be the best story you've written so far. You continue to be a bit lazy with the grammar, but there is really nothing much that detracts from the story, despite what the Author's Hangout grammar police might proclaim. It's been my experience that 99.9% of the readers here could care less about grammar, unless it is so atrocious that it detracts from the readability of the story. The basic objective it seems to me is for the author to entertain and stimulate the reader, which you certainly have done once again. Oh, and I see you have nominated me for some of those annual awards. I would prefer that you un-nominate (is that a word?) me. but no big deal if you don't. I have absolutely no interest in that sort of farce. It's not about the readers, it's about who has the most alts. That's why I avoid the forums. I don't have much interest in alts yakking to one another about nothing that matters much. You be good now, bad boy!

All this time I thought you were just a pompous ass (lol). I had no idea you can write (lol).

This was one of the best stories I have read on here.

Wonderful background. Nicely detailed. Excellent dialogue. Good, suspenseful build up to the sex scene.

Very believable story. I had a most enjoyable read.

Good luck in the contest. I hope you win.

The sex was hot and the writing was precise and impactful.

So Sarahhh & BOSTONFICTONWRITER are your biggest fans? Sarahhh has a dick and BFW is a pussy.

then I suggest you check out "You Think Making Love is Easy?" by Marshtickledkitty. Just click on the New Story list and it's right there. Or find it in the Valentine's Day Contest, as opposed to this idiot speak.

I dont get wet very often from reading something. I am a grandmother. but this did it. thank you, Judy

This is REAL writing-not just stroke material-not that I have a problem with stroke material, mind you. Keep it up-I\\\'m adding you to my Favorites.

Are there no standards of any sort on this site? This is way beyond bad, in fact I can't think of an apt word to describe this piece of idiotic writing.

Well Jim, yet another competent Scouries tale of incest. I liked the plot and characterisation and your hint of a possible sequel involving Craig. A point of interest – Jonah was swallowed by a big fish (whale??) not Jason; an author of your standing should not have made that error! Pete.

once again, fabulous! Please give me another chapter soon! this is a great story line and fantastic writing! luv ya, Michelle

Bad dog, bad dog, now go play on the freeway.

This is a real love story, very beautiful, even poetic.

i really enjoyed it. Its sweet and tugs at your heart

I like your writing style.............actually i love being aroused when i rad ur stories............

Its awesome fun getting fucked after i get horny post my read..........

This is one of the hottest stories I have ever read!This story made me so horny I could barely finish it.This subject is a big fantasy of mine.Please write more.Marie

this story is the best erotica I have read in many a year, and I thank you. I hope you will write more stories like this. anyome who does not know how pornography differs from erotica simply has to read this story and it will be clear. These are real people and not machines. They have real feelings, real needs, real misgivings, real delights. I love the humanity and their enjoyment in sensuality. I loved the mutuality of pleasure. This is first rate writing and it is an absolutely wonderful story.

AN EROTIC TALE DRIPPING WITH PASSION AND LUSTFUL HUNGER.

A MARVELOUS TALE THAT LEAVES YOU WANTING MORE

Go away, you are dragging this site even lower than it is by submitting this crap. All the really good authors are leaving because of you.

Wonderful how some of these commenters themselves come up with two cents' worth of crap! How on earth can this writing style be likened to a five or six year old's? If kids could write like this their parents would be multi-millionaires just from their agent's fees!

As for better writers leaving the site, there aren't more than a handful of better WRITERS on the site anyway! Which ones have left? And, of those, which ones were driven away by Jim and his stories?

Get a life (preferably on another site) and leave us to enjoy quality writing from a superb storyteller.

The most amazing story I have read on this site. Your sensual language, intense phrasing, and nuanced prose is just absolutely delicious. Thank you!

you have the rare ability to take your readers to new and excitng heights & to keep them their like a long lingering orgasm-well done

I've read a few of your stories, and they just keep improving. You have an amazing grasp of language, and you really know how to set a scene. I look forward to reading more your sexy stories. Very much a turn on!

Writer, if this story works for you, please commit suicide ASAP, and take yourself out of our gene pool. My God, this was pathetic. I couldn't even force myself to finish it.

Damn you can write. What a story. I am almost without words. Your talent is amazing.

This "writer" consistently produces poorly conceived and badly developed story lines. This particular one is worse than Scouries' average, which is itself very low.

This "writer" consistently produces poorly conceived and badly developed story lines. This particular one is worse than Scouries' average, which is itself very low.

Wonderful piece . . whens the next chapter coming???

That was wonderful, very hot. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Judy

I fail to understand the mentality or the motives of the few assholes who post derogatory comments on the output of this author who is one of the best. His tales of incestuous relationships are, in my opinion, gems.

Most of your stories are great first chapters to longer works but you never spend the time and effort to expand them. You just write another first chapter. Is it easier for you to do this than to develop additional characters and longer plot lines?

Fantastic as usual, I don't know where you get your inspiration, but everything you write is totally erotic and loving. I can't understand the comments from others, such as "could not force myself to finish". You sir are trully gifted.

I liked the story, a lot. I think Literotica should ban anonymous comments. Some of the idiots complaining about your stuff would shut up if they had to provide their logon pseudonyms.

Are you the next Shakespeare? No. Are you a competent and entertaining writer? Yes!!!

Your story was amazing! I cant wait for another chapter. As for the negative comments, there is not many better stories or writers on this site and if they dont like the stories you write then they should not waste their time or ours reading them. For the others like myself who enjoy your stories I hope that you continue writing.

I can only say Oh My God. That is the very best I have ever read. forget those asshole that don't know how to ENJOY a story.

I'm waiting for the next chapter and hope it is as good as this one. Love the story line.

Love it can't wait for more

Like others have said, "when is the next part coming?" I loved it and wish to see more.

.......Enjoyed reading and dreaming at same time.....

I'd love to have a sequel....

Please tell me you're writing a sequel. I feel like you're fucking me, teasing me with your big cock, and just when I'm ready to release, you pull out. Please master, please let me cumn. Please tell me what happens next...

Please tell me you're writing a sequel. I feel like you're fucking me, teasing me with your big cock, and just when I'm ready to release, you pull out. Please master, please let me cumn. Please tell me what happens next...

I loved this story...Please continue writing about it including all three characters!!!

female point of view. This, I think, was one of the best I have read. They aren't really "strokin'" material, but they are excellent and fun reads. Personally, I like a bit more foreplay and lovin' with lots of oral sex, sloppy sex, and lots of kissing and licking and rubbing before getting speared by the monster cocks. Since I don't have a monster cock, I can't relate. but I like to hear the moans and feel the trembles and shaking that leads to orgasm from lengthy touchy, feely. I don't get off as much with your stories, but I really like them to read because you set good situations and leave us dangling with nothing but our imagination to take us beyond the story to our imagination and fantasy. As much as I'd like to see "conclusions" to your stories, I think I like the endings that my own mind conjures up - there can be many, and that's the fun of reading. Thanks for your contributions - those of us who read and don't write appreciate your efforts. I don't know how many people have a hard-on for you and want to bash your every submittal, but I agree with an earlier comment that the Anonymous option should be eliminated, and those who make comments need to be recognized. Maybe then the unwarranted bashing will stop or, at least, be diminished.

i love the whole set up...placing the characters ...but we need more...its not finishe yet...please continue

I liked the slow boil very much. I think the sexy encounters might be a little slower with more foreplay and build up, but I am not a writer and I found myself there. From a man's point of view, it was thought provoking and definitely had me dry stroking. Yummy!

Wow, man. You don't disappoint, do you?

Wow. Just, wow. You are simply amazing. Anyone who has anything bad to say about you has seriously got something wrong with them.

I think you should continue the story. 2000% Sure you should.

Again, amazing story. Keep on writin', you're definetly great at it.

This I think my be the best or at least among the best you have done. Well of the ones I've read thus far by yourself. Thanks I hope you won the contest. Please keep writing because we your readers will be waiting.

Awesome story, I want another chapter... what happens when the brother gets to Hawaii. You are by far my favorite writer.

I really love this story. It defiantly draws you in. I hope you add another chapter with Craig.

I've had you as a 'Favorite Author' since I discovered Literotica not too long ago, and read the first of your stories I came across in a random search. Boy, did I love that I lucked out that night! =)

Anyway, I just wanted to say what so many others have said: your work is wonderfully crafted and well written in plot and character development - heck, all the technical aspects are great! Totally LOVED this story - and could really go for more doses of this father-daughter-son team!

Can hardly wait for your next story and I hope you continue this one for sure. Having spent some time on Maui it makes it even better, thanks.

I've been wondering if there is (or will be) another part to this story? Like when her brother gets there and how that progresses?

Thanks! =)

Ooh, What did her daddy tell Craig??

To be honest, this was a surprise to find this story so good to read. Worth the five stars I gave it, and worth a sequel.

Now if you could quit with the fake contests on the forums, you would be a valuable user on the site. ;) Until you quit those fakes, you will never make my favorite authors list here, even if your stories keep making my favorites.

I hope this story will have another chapter with the brother it would make it better I simply love it

Great story - now what happens when Craig arrives?

Much as I love your stories, and I do love nearly all of them, I really hated this one. Sorry.

you really know how to write. your stories are super. youmake your characters come alive on the page and don't go crazy describing the sex scenes. you tell a story about family that are very caring and in love with each other. keep up the beautiful work. thank you very much.

Loved it, but wheres the sequel??????

I'm new to this site, and 5 years late to your post of this story, though, like others, hope to see the sequel someday. I'm a bit nervous to post this under my login - hope you understand, but will check for the sequel from time to time.

Regards, An Excited Reader.

Lol, EVERYONE knows he never does sequels or follow up chapters, lol!

involved, detailed, romantic, erotic, and easy to put yourself into the female role... just so damn sexy!

next chapter please

Well what happens when Craig finally arrives???

I like it as is!

In my mind when Craig visits he and sis cum together and he leaves only to find a girl back home because he can clearly see dad and sis are in love and he was in the way.

I like the New Hampshire origin, as I have spent most of my life in that state and can attest to every detail in the story...I could completely go for a ticket to Hawaii right now because winter is coming.

stop leaving it short. Your stories need conclusions.

Another 5 star story!! You need to write more

Just Kate and Daddy would be perfect but now you have to drag the loser brother Craig in....you should have stuck him with an island girl since they excited him so much!!

Good story. Liked the characters. Nicely paced. Kinda wish there was a follow-up story but happy with this one by itself. 5/5* Fav

Didn’t like the inclusion of Craig, yet again it feels unfinished.

In my book, three is a crowd in a love story. And the story already begins with the revalation the female MC tries out men like clothing items during a shopping spree. Girls who do that seldomly are able to bond emotionally. They keep on wondering, they keep on comparing, they crave the tingles that only come with a new infatuation and fade quickly. So she will probably uphold the daughter-father bond and the sister- brother relationship, but she will also sooner or later fuck the surfer boys, most likely.

That was super fun and sexy. Loved the detail of their outdoor adventures (indoor too..... lol).

Thank you!