by RedHairedandFriendly
I like how the action builds slowly. She is a lot more ready than he thought she was. You have to tell us what happens next!
RedHaired and Friendly:
You have put it all in this one. Nervousness, anxiety, arousal, denial, desire, and of course pure wet eroticism. Being a female author gives you a great advantage over us mere males; There is simply no way we can tell what is happening in a woman's head and her feelings during love making unless she chooses to tell us. Yes we can read the bodily reaction. Yes we know what's going on in our minds and bodies, but we simply can't get into hers. I have to tell you, you do what you do, well. Ronnie W.
Very sultry and detailed. I bit heavy on the use of singular names for a certain body part, but then again overuse of other names grows even more eye-straining. Gives a deep view into the inner mind of the female half of a session.