All Comments on 'Heartless'

Strange story about a woman without a heart [or so she thinks] written by an author who puts her heart and soul into her work. Very well constructed. Not a very erotic story but a true love story.

Enjoyed it very much, Thanks.

my favorites of all your work. I'm glad you reposted it but I think it would go over better as a short story e-novel...hint hint.

Definitely one of the best I have ever read on here. Thank you.

Well written! Well done! I was glued to the story! Thanks for the story!

Beautiful story. Wonderful, although almost painful to read. (Btw, it's good to see you back.)

-- KK in Texas

A special romantic story. Thank you.

I love that story, no matter how often I read it! Wonderful story!

This has always been one of my favorites from you, Molly. Thanks for reposting it here!

I enjoyed it from start to finish. Thank you for posting it.

Love this story and loved reading it again.

This is a great story and, I think, very well written. You did a wonderful job of building the characters and creating the inner conflict in Amelia. I was caught up in the story right from the beginning and I missed three calls while I finished it. Thank goodness for voicemail!

wow, what an amazing story!

I've never left a comment on a story before, but this was so beautiful I just had to. The pain and fear of the main character was so real. The moment when she accepts love is moving, inspiring and fulfilling for the reader. Thank you for sharing.

I've read this before and i love it! Both times I could feel her pain because it felt so real. He was also my favorite character for the longest time keep up with the good work. I love all your stories and i can't wait to read more.

Well done and good entertainment. You do write so very well.<P>PT

This was a great story. I love the way you write. I am going to go read more of your other stories. Keep it up.

Thanks for a great story. It was easy to understand her problems the way you presented them. I'll try another story tomorrow.

like reading a page from my journal! I felt so much likeness with Amelia...

Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. Great job!

u hav just became my fav writer in literotica. ur stories rock and this one blew me away. I love how all ur stories are so different from other romantic stories. at the beginning, most of them are filled so much pain but then at the end it so happy and sweet it just wanna make u cry LOL ! anyway awesome story and PLSSSS continue to write !

Thank you Molly.

What a wonderful story. You brought tears to my eyes. I felt like I was actually one of the characters, could feel just what their emotions were. Terrific job. Please write more soon.

can't find love. Believe me, I know. Great story, though.

You are skilled and capable of writing a good story. However you need more research on your facts, and I do not think that your characters behave in a believable manner. She is too damaged to ever get it right. The damage was done while she was young and it isn't likely to change for the better. He is too egocentric to take no for an answer and is just making an ass out of himself because he isn't comfortable with any kind of failure in his life. He plays head games with her and eventually breaks her resolve even though it is obvious that she is not able to form healthy relationships. The treatment for "compartment syndrome" is a faciotomy where they basically slice the appendage open so that I looks like a burst wiener that has been boiled too long. I leaves a huge scar and takes months to heal because it is never sutured together. Just my opinion though. anon jerry

I've read this story on more than one occasion and it always brings tears to my eyes. Well done, SweetWitch

i cried .. amazing.

amazing

I really empathise with Amelia because it's a story about feelings being burnt by one's first love, which is what happened to me. Some of us feel like this and want to be chased and have our defences broken down by the right person so we can love and be loved..

I surely loved your story, please keep on writing more,

will you?!

Love returns if you're giving it, ...

this is such a sweet story! i loved it! keep writing :)

I was beaten, heart continuously broken, told from my dad's side of the family I was a bastard child, raped, abused...every time I opened my heart, it was severed and broken. I know what it feels like to not want to believe that anyone can love you.. You feel like you aren't worthy to be loved by anyone and you live on the barrier between darkness and death. You shut your heart away and surrender yourself to a heart as cold as ice... never to love or laugh again... and you don't....

This story has moved my heart of ice to cry tears... ones i haven't cried in years. Thank you...thank you and one day maybe I will find my Devlin

sorry...

Can make me cry....

This one right here.... Made me sob. Loved it. Five stars a million times over.

Amazing story. I even cried a little...

Loved it so much!! I even started crying! Great job :)

THE BEST AND BRIGHTEST DIAMONDS ARE ALWAYS THE HARDEST TO MAKE SHINE AND IF THE OLD ADAGE "LOVE CONQUERS ALL" THIS STORY IMPLFIES THAT. TK U MLJ LV NV

Rich with the reminders of what life can throw at us. Beautifully done.

I feel like the woman in this story....maybe someday some will show me like they showed her.....Such a wonderful story..no words I feel can express how close this story plays to my heart....

What's he trying to kill her and this guy is the definition of a stalker, sorry not fun for me

Thank you for writing!

The characters were well developed really fun to read. Amelia the main character had a snow white feel without the seven dwarfs. Devlin was a perfect Prince Charming and the storyline was magnificent at worst. The ending was real feel good but could've had more after the Seattle apartment scene. This story would make a blockbuster movie. Thank you author for an excellent fun and truly enjoyable ride. Please keep writing.

You manage the tricky bits of dialogue and the passion of feelings in a manner the rest of us should learn. Real heart-string pulling stuff !

Have you ever thought of a teach-in on lit?

HP

To Love And Hate! And Love Again. Just Great. Thank You.

One of the best! Beautifully written and full of emotion!

Still trying to push this Star counter past five....

I've put this story into my Favorite's List so that I could read it over and over. I loved this tale from the very first time I read it. Thank you for this wonderful gift you've given us. Best wishes and God Bless.

MoogPlayer

I don't think I've ever used those two words together. This story hit me especially hard because I loved a woman who had been similarly damaged in her childhood. I was glad that Devlin finally broke through. I didn't, although I tried for 33 years.

A life devoted to holding onto hurt and hate is a tragic waste. I think you captured it well.

So, first of all, I liked your story; it was uplifting without being cliche, which is not an easy thing to pull off.

I do wonder though, did you do any research on these kinds of people? I don't mean formal research necessarily, but are these characters based on real life people , either from your own life or people you've read about? Because there seems to be a discrepancy between what is said about Devlyn and what his actions say: they say he never gives up, and yet he's calling her a bitch and walking out on her within , what is it, a week? He says he wants her to be happy, but his actions seem to be more geared towards getting into her pants, which he does really fast, than actually getting to know her and find out what makes her happy. And sure, the story suggests that he doesn't need to take time to find out makes her happy because he already knows, but in my, admittedly limited, experience, when a man just assumes he knows what a woman wants/needs because he's observed her, despite the fact that he has never talked to her, not to mention her repeated statements to the contrary, that man is usually bad news. Has anyone else experienced otherwise? Because if this were someone I knew, I would advise her to file a restraining order.

Regardless, I really did enjoy the story, thanks for writing.

Sincerely,

SOT

Enjoyed it...no reservations or exceptions.

Your name should be "Spouter Of Bullshit". You're just a snot nosed kid and don't know a damn thing about life. You haven't lived long enough to have experienced anything much less have an educated opinion or comment. So until you're about 35 to 40 years old, shut the fuck up...boy!

A very well-written story.

I enjoyed it hugely.

Thank You

HP

I enjoyed reading.

Though i couldn't call it understated.

I can't stand obnoxious people and I was going nuts before finishing the first page. Probably missing a good story but not my cup of tea. I gave up on it.

It doesn't matter how many times I read this story, I still end up with tears flowing down my face. Great job SweetWitch; and thank you for sharing your beautiful mind with us all....

MoogPlayer

And who doesn't love a happy ending. I laughed out loud when I read the part about her wanting to stab her eardrums with her letter opener.

I had mixed emotions about this story. On one hand, it’s a very good story, a romance with a happy ending. And very well written, too. On the other hand, I absolutely despised one of the main characters. “Devlin” is the kind of person I can’t stand to be around. The obnoxious asshole who doesn’t know the meaning of the word “No”. So he pushes and pesters and badgers and keeps on pushing, never letting up. I’ve known a few “Devlin”s in my life and hated every one of them. That’s the reason I didn’t like the story. It just reminded me too much of some bad people I’ve known.

This anonymous obviously voted for Trump since they are both heartless! This is an excellent romance story. Devlin is a very sympathetic character. He can see that Lia needs love and care. That’s why he doesn’t take no for an answer.

Really good story.

I understand that you had to drastically simplify and compress the time scale, so you obviously had to leave out masses of detail. Yes: people like Amelia would be unlikely to suddenly 'come right' (but not impossible), unless they were ready and she wasn't (IMnsHO); also it would take a lot longer and involve considerably more innocent intimacy -- to do any kind of justice to such, it would need to be a very long saga, and still people would complain. So I think you did well within the space &amp;amp;amp; time constraints you had.

You're writing a literary piece for a channel where people are looking for erotica -- so the people that object so strongly to the emphasis on sex in the story, are a little out of line. If I ever did a similar story I'd have a lot more 'intimate intimacy', but that is my style, not something I should ever demand of others!

I suspect that there are elements in the story, that are based either on your own experience, and/or those of people you've met.

I feel strongly that some of the criticism aimed at you is ill founded, but I note you've also had some very supportive comments.

Please continue writing, and publishing here!

I've not yet published here, but I intend to some day ...

Title says most of it. I didn't (couldn't) finish the story due to the male lead's obnoxious behavior. it is presented as romantic but it's not. and there's no magic pill to instantly heal that level of psychological damage.

Molly,

you make the rest of us look like beginners.

Thank you for a truly soul-searching story

HP

Reminded me of the Harlequin romances my wife used to read, and, while having some human interest value like the Harlequins, made about as much sense, meaning not so much, with her exaggerated reaction to one boyfriend's screw-up. This was combined with the even more exaggerated pursuit (so much so, that several view it as stalking) of Devlin, in the face of repeated rejections. Again reminiscent of the Harlequins, with some wealthy stud pursuing some highly desirable, but insecure dame who expects him to know how she feels without telling him.

And, like the Harlequins, many dig it, although to me they were cheesy, rose-colored, idealisms of what girls might imagine their prince charmings to be, making it difficult for real guys to live up to a woman's fairy-tale expectations. (Just as porn makes it difficult for a gal to live up to sex expectations that are warped/unbalanced to the sex extreme to the diminishing of warmth and solicitude that might be conducive to a woman opening up more sexually.)

Obviously, different people like different things, and, while there was nothing wrong with this well written fantasy, it just was not my cup of tea.

Paul in Oklahoma

Devlin should be in jail with a restraining order for stalking. Amelia should have run and just kept running from him.

What an ass. I see no reason for his behavior and the fact that she fell for him just confirms how screwed up she is. He abused her by stalking her. Had to mark it down for that reason alone.

And there’s always a “But”. I am, judging by the comments I read, definitely in the minority, but that’s ok with me, since I have been there most of my life. I agree with other people who have said that Devlin was a stalker, pure and simple. He stated himself that he never took “No” for an answer. And judging by what the story told us about him, he sounds like a man who believes his wealth and status entitle him to “never take no for an answer”. I think a person like that may only understand a couple of things. The possibility of going to jail, or the possibility of a bullet in the face. In this story everything works out, they lived happily ever after. But in real life there are some people who would have brought charges against Devlin and tried to have him jailed. And then there are some who would have just resorted to the bullet in the face. Like it or not kids, that’s real life.

A nicely-told tale.

Thank you.

HP

both the characters are annoying as fuck. he had pictures of her up on his wall and moved his business just to be near her? that’s called STALKING! this story didn’t feel romantic at all, it felt like something that should be in the nonconsent category. 1/5

After reading all the comments—67 at the moment—it may be time for you to clean, oil up, and load the Parker again, this time with 000 buck. Stalker? Devlin? Seems like only someone with a ginormous hole in their soul would give your story such a reading. This is my third time through, but failed to comment before. Shoulda.

I have a dear friend very much like Amelia. Badly damaged by abusive parents and a heartbreaking string of romantic misfortunes, she has totally given up on finding that special someone. I would reach out to her myself, trying to convince her that she can safely lower the drawbridge, but I’m nearly old enough to be her grandfather. As her friend, I will continue to tell her that she’s not the problem, and hope that one day somebody very much like me, except with more appropriate numbers on his birth certificate, will come into her path.

The story is good. But it has a weird transition, dick walks out 9n her... Okay... She remembers her horrible life,, okay. But is d a memory? It starts like he is. But ends that they are together????

Worthless sluts don't deserve to be loved by any man

I gave up reading this weird tale when he consistently refused to accept her "No".

I mean no does mean no doesn't it?

He was far too intense from the outset. He said he knew that she was suffering and yet he arrogantly decided he would not just ignore her suffering, but both rub it in and then add to it. To him it did not matter what her wishes and desires were, he was going to force his will and way on her. That's just plain physical and mental abuse. Hells bells and buggy wheels I have known men to be found guilty of rape for doing less and ignoring less than he did.

She had just cause to have him charged with breaking into her home. What a despicable thing that was to do to someone he believed to be running from life scared, and suffering alone to hide from her fears.

There's nary a skerrick of love or consideration in him for her, or anyone else. It's all about him. He is arrogant enough to believe he knows better than her what she is capable of receiving or changing. All that matters to him is what he wants.

Arsehole A+++

What is wrong with the folks who think he's a stalker? I thought it was a wonderful story and Alinson has all my sympathy. He wasn't wrong to pursue her, woo her, and win her! Again, nice story, couldn't stop until I finished it.

Wow some really powerful and vehement comments here. My take on this is that he had fallen for her and wasn't going to let her ruin her life by feeling she wasn't worthy of love and happiness. Abuse does that to people and can take many years to go away if it ever does. I don't feel he was being a stalker I didn't get that vibe at all. I enjoyed this story and would recommend it to anyone. BardnotBard

Well done, thoughtful story. It's not for everyone. Five stars, "Just because."

I managed to make it through most of page 2 before I gave up.. This was a really dumb plot and I just lost patience that it would recover. Two completely unreal MCs with some of the dumbest dialog around. 2*