All Comments on 'Heaven's Kingdom Ch. 01'

Unless you have the literal power to move heaven and earth... Sometimes you have to do things you'd rather not. Besides, one's capacity to truly love is not limited to one. Or at least it shouldn't be. Having more than one child but being unable to love their parent or their siblings? Preposterous.

Hope he makes his happily ever after, even if he has to bind himself within yet another cage not of his liking. Marriage, to any other.

A 99.99% perfect chapter. I hope we can see a lot more of your very engaging conversational style in the near future. The premise of the story, along with the minimal cast of characters, has allowed you to create a whole world of wonder that supports the details around the two lovers bantering extremely well in 4 pages of text. Please keep up the excellent work.

The only suggestion for improvement that I can make is to replace the word “grinded” with the word “ground” on page 2 (“ closed as she grinded her hips against him”).

Thanks for listening to this feedback!

Wow. Looking forward to more.

I loved all the soft femdom thing as well as its premise justifing a harem

Hope you gift us a hole serie because it got potencial!

I love your story, great writing and characters. And it’s sweet. More, please!