All Comments on 'Heavy Traffic'

Good story. Well written. Tended to drag a little in places. Probably be improved cutting it back to maybe forty pages

You put a lit of work in it thank you

kind of a slog, couldn't stick with it

Long but good. For those of you who complain about the length, did you not notice this is in the novels section? Maybe the criticism would have been less if this were serialized. I, for one, liked it.

Wasn’t this posted previously? I realized after a couple of pages i had read this before.

Well worth the second read, a most riveting tale, very well done BB! Be well.../A

If they allowed more than 5*'s YOU EARNED IT !

Thanks for the read

When the story was edited to correct a few typos, it was resubmitted as a single post instead of by chapters.

I knew I had read and enjoyed this before. Thank you for the refresh.

An excellent adventure by a very good story teller, what more can I say. I enjoyed it. 5 stars

That was a really nice and unexpected touch to name the Foundation after Michelle. It was gruesome to read about her torture but I can see where it fits into the story. A good read. Longest single story I've read on this site. Not a complaint at all. Just an observation.

5/5

J

I hope to read you again in the future.

Great story! Worth 5 every day of the week.

Loved this tender Romance story, wrapped around lots of suspenseful interludes. Unquestionably, one of the best edited stories on Lit. Very readable due to use of good punctuation. I noticed one particular homonym typo using queue instead of cue. Spell check won't pick up on any real words used poorly.

Magnificent story here. I love the preemptive counter offensive. The best defense is always an overpowering offense!

One of the best stories I have ever read, on this site or anywhere. Masterpiece. Thanks so much for posting this! 10/5

Great story 2nd time around since it was a repost ?

Excellent! 6/5

I really enjoy reading your stories, it’s clear that you research your subjects, which, to me, adds to the enjoyment.

Thank you.

Great story. I liked how you kept us interested chapter after chapter.

I liked it a lot.

Wow.

I wasn't sure what to expect, but this was an excellent story! Well-written, well-told, and well-researched. I questioned the automatic attraction and love between Sean and Amanda, but the author nailed it by just letting it evolve. And at the end, it was complete.

This is a awesome story. Mickey's fate at the hands of those sub-human Orcs was fucking awful to read, even knowing she was a character in a work of fiction. But to me that's the mark of a great story, though my blood was boiling, vengeance was had in the end. You're a superb writer, one of the best on this site.

Okay I was flippin mad at Amanda hauling off to jump a ride with no maturity of whether everything was truly secure before just jumping in a vehicle she was familiar with and almost put this whole situation into a dilemma. Yes, the author saved the day, but with all the issues going on safety wise this abberation of lack of smarts was simply a huge failure by three different women involved in this simple aspect to the story (Gail, Jeannie and Amanda). What a bimbo trio that almost brought this to Sean's knees with this massive faux pas. Yes, life worked out in the end as it should.......... :-)

No Australian would call a 'koala' a 'koala bear'. There is no such animal.

Great story 5 stars.

Absolutely brilliant story without a doubt the best I have ever read on Lit.

Many thanks for posting your excellent work for us all to enjoy only reason I gave 5 stars was that's all I can give.

I wanted to leave five stars, but IOS 17.0.2 will not let me activate the stars. The story was excetional and I couldn’t put it down. Excellent is all I can say.

Great story. You are a gifted author and thanks for the entertainment!

Loved this absolutely amazing story. It was so gripping that has to spend the entire weekend reading it. Sean and Amanda were true soulmates. 5 ⭐.

Nitpicking-

1. Don't think DeMarcus deserved any kind of mercy. He should have been in prison getting abused daily.

2. How can someone claim to love someone after making them eat shit.?

3. Sean should have informed Amanda about DeMarcus's plan, so she would have not gotten into the car. It was just a plot armour that saved her from getting raped/killed before Sean was able to rescue.

4. Not enough erotica for Literotica.

These are just few points that bothered me. But it's still 5 star story and that is exactly what I have rated.

Outstanding story The geography is very accurate

This is a wonderful story that pulled on my emotions and I was angered by the disrespect shown for the girls and women. The Marines and the Wallace women are two forces of nature. Thank you, Bobby.

outstanding

LITERATURE!! The details and emotions described are among the best in literature.

I gave it a five-star rating because of the writing and fun story. I did have to laugh about the fantasy of how formidable he was because of Hsing-I. That was just a silly fantasy at best. And the trained hand-to-hand fighting skills of Marines. Pawleeze! Even Forest Recon Marines hardly have time to learn real fighting skills. They are shooters and riflemen, NOT fighters. Of course not any different from the silly John Rambo thing with Green Berets being real trained killers. Neither group is actually trained to be an unarmed fighter. All fantasy, but so what, it was still a great story. It reminds me of the time one of my students, who was really impressed with what I was teaching asked his father (an actual Green Beret Vietnam was veteran) if, with his Green Beret training, he would be able to beat me in a real fight. His dad started laughing and said, "Hell NO!" He is a professional fighter with years of experience. I was trained to teach and lead indigenous people to fight with guns and explosives. The father was actually amazed that his own son believed the movies. But again, thank you for these great romantic stories

I do not accept nor appreciate deviant and destructive depravites in stories nor in life.

Craig

Fantastic story.

If you were to listen to JimDiamond, Marines and all Special Forces, apparently can't fight hand to hand.

I think a lot of them would beg to differ.

Great story! I really enjoyed it.

Thanks

5 stars