by victoriawhita
I'm not just referring to this piece, but your writing in general and overall; you're a talented writer. What I particularly enjoy is the way in which you draw the reader in until it seems as if we are almost sitting on your lap, well I can but hope.
I am starting to write for Lit and hopefully I can persuade you to read my stuff as it gets on the site. More importantly though is how can I persuade you to reply, so that we can keep in touch? Any suggestions please send to london_james2010@yahoo.co.uk
Thanks a lot and best of luck
James
Very nice buildup and use of everyday context. I look forward to reading where this will go next. I especially enjoy reading sensual erotica from a woman's perspective. Men could learn a lot about women by reading this sort of work.
This is chapter 1 and I have many ideas for what's going to come next in the story. The ending is abrupt to leave you in anticipation for chapter 2.
Victoria
this shit was dumb, u should have continued more, u just left me hanging, i have taken shits better then reading this story