by mfz834
interesting story - if I could follow it .... I would presume that English is your second language. Get an editor to help with the flow.
This story gets uncomfortable to read because of all the non-English structures. It is not just a word here and there; the problems are all through it. For example "Since ever", or "I abandoned the thinks about work" and "I'll get rubber", and quite a number of others.
Yes, I know. This is because English isn't my only language and when I wrote that I was constantly thinking in other language and then I had no much time to review it.
Next part shall be more checked and I would find someone to check it before submission. Maybe some editor from here, maybe from somewhere else. I know how the story would develop but probably for couple of days I won't publish next part before it would be finished and checked.
Thanks for reading and for every comment about it. I can assure this is just the beginning and the rest will be getting better and better, not just to read but the story also.