All Comments on 'Helping Mother in Law at Hospital'

by Marklaser

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
rough

Due to my own "relationship" with my MIL i was naturally intrigued by this story...but after just the first paragraph I had to stop. The grammer was just too rough to work my way through. Maybe consider finding someone on here to edit it for you and then resubmit it! Pleeaase!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Promising Story but.....

I assume English is not your first language ! Get an editor please. Keep writing

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Ugh

Get an editor and work on your English. In the meantime, please don't write anymore. It’s just too painful to attempt to read your stuff

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Couldn't read it all

I concur with the others, get an editor before you write anymore, it was a painful read and so I stopped. ........one star

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Ouch!

Only read 1 paragraph. Too many abbreviations and bad grammar. Just painful to try to read.

HardXsRHereHardXsRHerealmost 8 years ago
Sounds Like The Author Is

From India Bad Grammar and Spelling

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
English not your first language

Obviously not. Could be a good story but I will never know because it's too painful to read. For Gods sake get an English speaker to edit this and resubmit!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
WTF

I come to read stories BUT I really do not understand why people ever post stories. What I mean is you people must be English Teachers because you pick apart everything it is either spelling grammar or any little thing. F u all

reader_3634reader_3634almost 8 years ago
Really hard to read

I am certainly no grammar pedant. Homonyms, Malapropisms and the occasional incorrect word/phrase - I can cope with most of them. However, when the language used is so awkward with has no natural flow and the level of error are sufficient to need multiple rereading to try to understand what is being said then it is too much effort to continue reading. Sorry

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Grammar

Two paragraphs in it became obvious you're used to urban street syntax. Lots of volunteers in this sight to help with editing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Re: WTF

"What I mean is you people must be English Teachers because you pick apart everything it is either spelling grammar or any little thing."

Well, dumb ass.... if it's glaringly hard to read then we pick it apart. Of course, dumb fucks like you don't know better with your 3rd grade education.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Need to learn English

So you can write. Your english is very ruff and unreadable.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Well i liked it

It is always unfortunate when readers feel the need to be rude about a writers efforts. It is obvious that English is not your formal language but with a little bit of effort the reader can understand and enjoy the story. Comments about getting an editor should be read as constructive criticism. I enjoyed the story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Funny how....

Funny how so many comment on others spelling and grammar, yet they themselves make numerous errors in their comments! Let he who is without spelling fuck up, cast the first correction......

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago

Your writing shows promise for the future but if your going to use abbreviations so much you could do with explanations at first time use.

ramonbrookramonbrookalmost 8 years ago
Loved the story!

I like to read Indian based stories, however usually when I read a story from an Indian author it is a HARD read due to translations and use of wording.

But it is NOT so with this story and I enjoyed it very much!

VERY HOT STORY

Hope to see a chapter 2 and more for this story! 5*

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago
MIL?

As soon as I read MIL and FIL I stopped reading. If you can't be bothered to write then I'm not gonna be bothered to read.

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