by Marklaser
Due to my own "relationship" with my MIL i was naturally intrigued by this story...but after just the first paragraph I had to stop. The grammer was just too rough to work my way through. Maybe consider finding someone on here to edit it for you and then resubmit it! Pleeaase!
I assume English is not your first language ! Get an editor please. Keep writing
Get an editor and work on your English. In the meantime, please don't write anymore. It’s just too painful to attempt to read your stuff
I concur with the others, get an editor before you write anymore, it was a painful read and so I stopped. ........one star
Only read 1 paragraph. Too many abbreviations and bad grammar. Just painful to try to read.
Obviously not. Could be a good story but I will never know because it's too painful to read. For Gods sake get an English speaker to edit this and resubmit!
I come to read stories BUT I really do not understand why people ever post stories. What I mean is you people must be English Teachers because you pick apart everything it is either spelling grammar or any little thing. F u all
I am certainly no grammar pedant. Homonyms, Malapropisms and the occasional incorrect word/phrase - I can cope with most of them. However, when the language used is so awkward with has no natural flow and the level of error are sufficient to need multiple rereading to try to understand what is being said then it is too much effort to continue reading. Sorry
Two paragraphs in it became obvious you're used to urban street syntax. Lots of volunteers in this sight to help with editing.
"What I mean is you people must be English Teachers because you pick apart everything it is either spelling grammar or any little thing."
Well, dumb ass.... if it's glaringly hard to read then we pick it apart. Of course, dumb fucks like you don't know better with your 3rd grade education.
So you can write. Your english is very ruff and unreadable.
It is always unfortunate when readers feel the need to be rude about a writers efforts. It is obvious that English is not your formal language but with a little bit of effort the reader can understand and enjoy the story. Comments about getting an editor should be read as constructive criticism. I enjoyed the story.
Funny how so many comment on others spelling and grammar, yet they themselves make numerous errors in their comments! Let he who is without spelling fuck up, cast the first correction......
Your writing shows promise for the future but if your going to use abbreviations so much you could do with explanations at first time use.
I like to read Indian based stories, however usually when I read a story from an Indian author it is a HARD read due to translations and use of wording.
But it is NOT so with this story and I enjoyed it very much!
VERY HOT STORY
Hope to see a chapter 2 and more for this story! 5*
As soon as I read MIL and FIL I stopped reading. If you can't be bothered to write then I'm not gonna be bothered to read.