by Daddys_Girl_69
I enjoyed reading this story, it is a lot better than your first story. You should continue writing this story.
I liked this story, aside from it being rather short, it still had the necessary erotica. I also agree with anon that this story should be further developed.
I think authors should use images instead of silly unrealistic numbers when describing body parts. Instead of writing "...my 10" cock...." You could have written, "my well endowed manhood."
Just my humble opinion.
It is what it is. If Anon doesn't like it, Anon shouldn't read it. Overall, a good example of what it is. I do agree room for a longer story with more detailed sex and look forward to your continued growth as a writer.
"If Anon doesn't like it, he shouldn't read ( mindless shit deleted )"
Seriously? How the fuck do you know it's a complete piece of shit until after you waste your time reading it? Fucktard!
By the way, I agree, it blows.