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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

That's it? Also watch your use of their, there, they're etc. You used their when it should have been there. This just didn't feel finished to me, will there be more?

JonTaylorJonTaylorover 11 years ago
Teaser

How did the murder get to the point of arresting someone when the supposed victim is still alive? How did a registered sex offender live there without the neighbors knowing? Credibility issues aside, I'll be watching for the rest of the story.

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Like to talk to both men and women about erotic writing. I am always looking for people to help me edit my work and welcome input about spelling, punctuation, syntax and the general readability of my stories. Right now, (June 2013) I am doing research for the stories I write ...