by EddyFox
A fantastic combination of the whimsical and the sensual!
I've just read your story from start to finish - you write very well - I've really enjoyed it.
i like your story a lot, you should make a series of stories about jodi and ian an d a whole bunch of adventures they have together, you could make books about them too if you wanted
i like your story a lot, you should make a series of stories about jodi and ian an d a whole bunch of adventures they have together, you could make books about them too if you wanted
enjoyed the originality of this story and the story line as well, something about an irish accent sends shivers all over. I thought you wrote it well too.
I think you have a really nice Storyline here, but the fact that the story jumps, randomly has characters appear from nowhere without introducing them and introduces elements like the elf/sprite with the feeling that there are paragraphs missing makes it really hard to read.
Minor notes:
Reveled, not reviled
elusive, not illusive.
Easy mistakes Loved the story, anyway. 6 stars if I could.
Liked the story but thought the leprechaun would have had a bit more magic than he did. What was the deal with the car keys and her dad? Ian just moved the keys and that was that. Seemed that there should have been a little payback or something for the crap they gave her.