All Comments on 'Hiding from Herself'

Given the many years that have passed, I guess we will have to be content with our own imaginings.

Gotta have more of this. Andy's mother needs her comeuppance, Dad needs to reassert his leadership over wife and Andy's older sister. Deanna needs to get the whole story, and needs to show the same respect her husband shows her. Oh, and Andy needs to extract sweet revenge by becoming happy and successful.

Agree that there needs to be more. Not necessarily a continuation of this, the opening stage, but more like a Part 2 (and Part 3?). The two lovers have achieved their union, and it was lubriciously lovely, but there are many story/character lines that beg for greater development. But, you don't NEED to do that; its just a suggestion, well knowing the work it would involve. Lovely work; very complex and passionate.

There has to be more, there has to be! Please tell me there is more, you can't stop there. Don't leave them unresolved.

4 stars. Would be 5 if not for the unresolved ending.

Thought it was a good story, but you just can't stop it like this. You need to finish it. Thanks

Good story! Where does it go from here? Please write more chapters. Thank you

Next part!!!

I actually like the story, but it’s unfinished there needs to be a resolve…father that stood up for her… what about mother and sisters…you can not let people hang without finishing…story could be 5 star material, but at end disappointing

I have the same questions as others been 17 years so doubt we get them

Good storyline, but a lot of inconsistencies as previously pointed out, plus a boatload of unanswered questions, almost as if the author got bored or wrote themselves into a corner, almost as bad as an unfinished series tbh. It was doing really well until the last page. 4⭐️

5* Does Frank sack his secretary?

Love the story but I’m left with so many unanswered questions. Does Mel and Frank forgive Deanne and does she even apologize?Does Deanne once again takes Mom’s side against Andy? And if the family stay divided.

I really enjoyed reading this. At the club, I expedited to see/hear Jo(Andy) and Blue jump to the front for their solos. The description of Andy's solo performance of her song was heart felt. Good job! Any critics need to remember this is your fantasy and your right to tell it.

LB

A lovely story. I do want to see the fallout - whether Deanne or Frank continue... i have a feeling he might walk out if she sticks with mummy and Beverly.

And the father.... good man finally standing up.

A fine story, but in retrospect some aspects of the plot are not convincing. Firstly, Melanie was able to borrow Deanne's dress (and shoes?) despite their difference in height (Melanie is nearly Andy's height, but Deanne is much shorter). In fact at that point in the story I thought Deanne must be conspiring to get Andy together with Melanie. Secondly, what were the band going to do if Andy hadn't been there to fill in. And lastly, why was Melanie invited to a family party, when Melanie and Deanne's friendship was apparently not close enough for Deanne to know that Melanie was a lesbian.

Loved the story. The problems that lesbians and gay men have when they need to approach family and friends with their sexuality this also includes all other types of people too feel comfortable in there skin. The story has romance, confusion and when love can be so strong. The intimacy they have for each other

I have to wonder, in the odd moment late at night, do you ever think of a chapter where Eva's secret lesbian past gets rubbed in her face?

This is a wonderful story.

This was truly a love story. Enjoyed it immensely. The characters were believable and I could tell that they truly loved each other. As others have mentioned, we definitely need to read more about these two!

Thanks for the great story!

Thank you for a stunning story you have written and glad Mel and Andy are a couple will you write more to this story so we can read that these two lovers get married I hope so they can live happily together because they deserve each other and the love for for each other is deep and true keep the stories coming please.Electricdreamer.xx

I’ve read all your stories but this one was my favorite. I feel these characters deeply and I think you did too. It just seemed so personal and like I could feel everything they did. Please consider writing more.

Wonderful story and enjoyed it lots ,would like to read a second part and will read this again...

Yes, I know you wrote this story 14 years ago, so you obviously figured that out for yourself. It's new and vivid to me, though.

I was really anticipating seeing Frank and Deanna face off, now that she knows he didn't cheat, and he now stands on the moral high ground. He can take a stand for Andy like nobody else. Another thing, with the talent she has, Andy NEEDS her music. That Harley she rides can't measure up to a Fender Strat and a Shure SM-58 in terms of self-expression.

So instead of a sequel, you might tell Aunt Trish's story. I just love her! This can give you the chance to follow up on Andy and Melanie without spoiling the newness and the thrill of their wonderful relationship.

Can you do part 2? Please.. thanks. 😁

The character buildup and tension is amazing but I feel like it needs more closure than just them being together. The family situation needs to be touched at again to see what eventually happens with Andy and her family. Otherwise I completely adore the characters.

Well written and nicely executed.

However, it needs finishing.

There are unfinished business not only as regards her family but also her sister.

Why the tight leather dress, etc.

Needs another chapter!

Since when did one word constitute a sentence?

Hi. Im 50/50 just my opinion... but too much sex and not enough drama & character building for me. Needed, MORE. More emotion. Not just family drama then sex

Your wriring

The storyline

The characters

The flow

Brilliant work

.... wish and want for on Melanie and Andy

...with this story---it feels unfinished. You've set up a great dramatic situation with Andy's family and then have just left it hanging with no resolution. It leaves the reader feeling cheated. It's certainly a well written story but it really needs completion. [And on top of that you need a scene showing Frank firing his malicious gossip of a secretary.]

There is more of this story that needs writing. Please continue writing.

It's too bad you're not writing here anymore; Andy and Melanie truly deserve at least a second chapter in their story that you tell so well.

I don't care that the family problems weren't resolved that's real life . things don't always get resolved. it was hot and sexy and andy and melanie ended up together which is all that matters. it was I thought well written too. thank you

VERY very good, and also very hot.

Fave story, and 5

..., I don't see any closure. Too much into themselves, and appearances.

I say screw 'em. (in fact I did, in my case. But I'm just the Black Sheep).

Except for Dad, who really wants Andy to be happy. And, of course, Frank, who actually understands and is accepting of it.

I can see Andy and Melanie sharing the rest of their lives together, regardless of what Family might think. Unfortunate that it will have to be like that, but Life goes on.

Love the story. Very in depth, and hot in all the right places.

I really like the story. I thought, though, that Andy's family's issues are unresolved. I understand their feelings at the gathering but would they ever change? Would they ever accept Melanie and her? What's the long-term relationship going to be? Anyway, thanks for the story.

I totally enjoyed this story, although I feel it would have been better had you added another couple of paragraphs to it, giving us closure. Still, it was a great story, and I thank you for sharing it with us!

So very well written. Easily one of the very best. I would also love to read more of Andy, Melanie, and what happened due to be nuclear fallout from that gathering. Please consider continuing this wonderful story? Thank you.

Greg

Totally great read! Only criticism i have is that theres no part two, you just left us hanging, like i said it was a great read and the sex was phenomenal and left me wet and wishing i had a gf. I would just like to know what happened with andy's family especially her bitchy mother and her sis when she found out her husband wasnt cheating on her at all. If you can find time to write a part two i know theres a lot of us that woud love to read it. This is still one of my fav's anyway.

This is a beautiful love story, and it shows that love conquers all!! Whilst we assume that Andy & Melanie live happily ever after, the story ends with the two ladies together, we are left to guess how their new life blossoms and how they resolve things with Andy's family, if at all .

Beautiful story, cleverly written & so seductively done too.

Due to lack of posts for a decade, shame the won't be a part 2, as I would have loved to have read how the bitch of a mother & sister were dealt with & the re-connecting with her father. Also how Frank & other sister continued (or not).

Shame, real shame - one of my top 10 stories & I've read hundreds on here over the years

Since eclecticdreamer hasn't posted a story in 10 years, I'm guessing there's no pt 2 on the way.

A Perfect 10 story!!! I've read over a hundred stories on the site and this is in the top 25. It is just that good. My only disappointment is there is no chapter 2 or ending:( Eclecticdreamer, where are you - may we please have a sequel. So much is left unresolved. Thank you.

Part 2 was brought up in 2012. Any way we could be told if it's gonna happen or not.

~patiently waiting still...

I agree with the many who say a second part is needed. Frank's trouble with Deanna, the secretary, Beverly and Trish need their own resolution also, not to mention the rest of the family. Great writing, though.

where momma gets what's coming to her for her betrayal of the family....*snarl*

I came so much when I read this it grabbed you and didn't let go! I really hope for part 2

when you close your eyes...people still see you...TK U MLJ LV NV

I keptlooking at the pages left in your story, waiting for it all to go to hell. Never have I read something this long that stayed so good. However, no matter what trials they were tested with, every fire they walked out of simply revealed them to be sexier and stronger, more tender and more real.

Thank you. MORE!

Love your story nead a sequel need more

Loved this story. The characters are realistic, it was well written, the storyline was addictive and the sex was hot! What more could I ask for except more?

a very good well written story but you need a sequel because the story was left unfinished. 5 stars

Ron

when they don't know who they are?

Hiding from Herself is a great story, well-written---if this is the right expression to use for a computer screen, it's a real page-turner. I've given you five well-deserved stars. But one criticism. The ending of the story was a bit abrupt. A good short story should have drama and elements of conflict and to satisfy the reader, the conflict should be resolved. You created several good levels of conflict here but the only one resolved was the "will-she, won't she?" between Andy and Melanie. There are at least three other areas of conflict in the story which you have left hanging. Unless you are planning/writing a sequel, then this leaves the reader feeling slightly unsatisfied.

I must say, this story was beautifully written. It showed a lot of love and passion between two women. I know it's been awhile since you have written, but I do wish you start again and give us all more stories as good as this one was.

(TT^TT) Tears of joy damn it... tears of joy

I have read all of your stories on here, ecleticdreamer, and it's a real shame that you stopped writing. The three stories you have on here are so well written and believable that we readers here are definately missing out with your absense. Anyways, thanks for sharing what you have though. :)

i so looooove the story !! i wish it will have a part 2 ! pleaseeeeeeeeee. i want to know their journey, until they grow old together. :)

Very very very very awesome story. Great emotions and confusion, you did an awesome job displaying that war within her, would love to see how it ends up, even if its been 8years since you posted this one. Very good work

Great story with lots of incredible personal, and real, feelings. TERRIFIC!

Wish i could find me a lover. Wonderful story. I really loved it. Part 2 time. Just see if her and sister deeane get along again.

it made me laugh when caught in Kitchen by Frank i enjoyed the nice build up

and will like the next installment

Thank you

Part 2!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Well written and engaging story, please add a next chapter to further develop their lives together.

this is such an incredible story not only from an erotic point but from a human emotional point written beautifully with so much detail covering everyone's feelings, anxieties and fears. would like to see how it may end. thank you for a wonderful story that touched my soul.

hope to see a part 2!

Part 2 pleaseeeeee !

I cannot wait for part 2!!!!!

Amazing!!!!!!!

This was one of my favorite story on Literotica! Please write soon! TY!

Thank you all so much for your lovely comments! I wrote this story when I was very young and it was so wonderful to see such words of encouragement logging back in to the site years later. I have decided to submit a part 2, and I hope you will all let me know if you enjoyed it as well.

You captured people's true feelings about homosexuality perfectly. They say things that hurt their friends or family so badly and all of that because they are so caught up in what others think. Some people come to accept it, but it will never be truly accepted if we still have parents and people who think like Andy's family. It's sad actually.

Just because you were hurt by a homosexual does not mean that all homosexuals are bad and dangerous. If everyone was to think like you do than logically every person should be in jail. You think that because one homosexual commits a crime that all homosexuals should be punished. Well if one man committed a rape than by your reasoning all men should be punished and so on and so forth. If you have a problem with homosexuals then why are you read a story about lesbians?

Wow this story had me rooting for Andy and The hot sex that follOwed just made me wet with anticipation. I could not stop playing with myself throughout the read. It was a very good story and I hope that you make more like it.

this story had me on edge! how andy was so afraid of how others saw her she constantly hurt melanie but she never gave up.her dad standing up for her brought tears to my eyes bc the same thing is happening to me...thanks for letting me know the path i should take <3

Words cant explain how great this story is. Im begging you to do a part two

Write the rest of this story ... it will be therapeutic to many troubled souls trying to make peace with having to be different ... Lots of Luv

... I find it interesting that Andy;s eyes start off grey then turn green half way through the story. otherwise very well written.

We Usually Are Born Into A Family. But Not Everyone

Lives To The Expectation Of Their Family. Unfortunately

Andy Is Not Meeting Her Mothers Expectations.

At Least Her (Andy's) Father & Aunt Are Backing

Her Up This Time Out Of The Closet.

P L E A S E, Continue The Story

It was great, understandable, and definitely sexy. I agree with everyone else puuuuuhhhhhhllllleeeeaaaassssse write a part two.

Loved the drama, loved the build up, loved the sex. Needs a part 2 to find out what becomes of them and Andy's family.

... is that the story ended! Please continue! I LOVED this!!! ~ L

Yes, we need a part 2 immediately!

Part 2!!

please write more

Best story I've come across, Part 2!!!

part 2, please? :)

part 2? :(

You are a good story teller but the end seems to be lacking.

i enjoy lesbian romance stories and you have written a great story for your readers. :) keep it up and hope you post something new or put up some more to this story as it kinda felt unfinished since you didn't tell us how Andy's family and friends coped with her decision to be with Melanie.

What a beautiful love story. I really enjoyed reading it. I'd give it more glowing praise if I could think straight right now, but my head is so filled with the passion and pain...it was intense.

i loved this story...but it was one thing that was getting to me...[in the beginning of the story Andy's eyes were gray then they changed to green...what's up with that?lol] I'd really love to know what happened after this with Andy and her family.

The story was a very fine one with a lot of emotions. I liked the way the story unfolded. It was a long story but, was really good. Hope you will write more such stories soon.

Just as your gently teasing descriptions of our lovely ladies leave us to fill in some of the details, the hot sex is detailed enough to bring pleasure... but most of all the story telling brings the characters to life, makes us interested in them as people... and able to feel so much more when they do on the page.

M

loved the story but so want to know what happens further between andy and her sis and dad etc.

I know there are suggestions in the responses to add a chapter. Please do NOT. This story has hit a perfect ending, with the reader left to complete it. Nothing better. I hate those stories where they all end up 'happy ever after'. Ever noticed that at the cinema now? Those darn focus groups they use always lead to dumbing down the story so they have to end on a laugh or completion. So few break the mould. Your story does, so leave it this way it is fantastically well written.

This story was amazing!! Not only was it well written...but it kept me hot and excited the whole time. keep writing!!

beautifull story thank u xoxoxoxoxo.....

This was a very high quality story. My emotions were involved, as well as my libido. I wish there were more stories like this on this site.

This is a beautiful story. I really think you have huge talent. I can' wait to see what else you've written!

This is an amazing and beautiful story, I couldn't stop reading.

wow amazing this is one of the best stroies on this site man you should make another one really cause this is really great man i love it