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magenta_moremagenta_moreabout 12 years ago
great read!

enjoyed your story...would like to be the woman getting it from that guy for sure! keep writing!

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Can't you stick to one tense???

Why do you—stupidly and irritatingly—keep switching between the past and the present tenses, even within a single paragraph?

After I'd read about two-thirds of a page of this dreck I stopped. This is NOT the way to write.

Carla in Seattle.

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