All Comments on 'Hinn Ch. 54-56'

But I feel I'm getting more explanation than story. I'm sorry I don't have any suggestions for how to fix that.

Really looking forward to reading more despite the above. Thanks for sharing your work.

Well, can’t disagree - there’s a lot of background, and some of it’s very relevant, but mostly this is my first long tale in this form. So I’m still learning!

That being said, I’m happy to hear you’re enjoying it. Thanks for letting me know!

I also enjoy seeing how the various characters react, as they discover more and more things. It is an important part of the development of the characters, and makes the story progress more smoothly. And there is a lot of preparation in real life, anyway. And the more links with reality, the more subtle is the suspension of disbelief.

OeldeWolf

Thank you for the compliment, and I'm glad it's drawing you in, OeldeWolf!