All Comments on 'Hitman Ch. 02'

Okay. Enjoyable yarn.

Please keep to past tense, using current tense makes it hard to follow especially if you jump between tenses.

Surprised he could oil door hinges from the hallway when doors always open into the apartment. Lucky for he wasn't short or hunched or the dart would have missed.

Chapters too short and tenses mixed; clarify tense changes by sub heads "date, time" or "yesterday", "earlier today", "now".

By the end of chapter 2 we need to know more about the narrator (hint, we the reader are playing the role of the narrator, so who exactly are we? Where are we from? Where are we aiming for in our retirement? Why did we retire? What motivates us to continue (and it must be more than the money)? What is it about us that makes us care about who we are and entice us to follow the role we have been given?