by Scorpio44
... in the contest. I was probably confused because I didn't understand the background of the story. Happy holidays,
always, E
You really need to bottle that stuff and send it to the White House and Capitol Hill. The ensuing hijinks would be worth watching. Good luck!
Cookie :)
i do have a problem with this story, although i liked the premise... where's the actual sex? and i do kinda feel like the whole christmas thing was tossed in rather than being an integral part of the story. maybe i'm just being picky, but since it's part of the contest i think i was expecting a little more =/
This could turn into an interesting series. My quibble was with there being so much TELL with so little SHOW, and there being so much technical backstory. Still, it was original and clever. Hope you keep refining the idea.
Rumple
Other than the scientific stuff flying over my head and the fact that the story seems to have nothing to do with Christmas except the actual word "Christmas" near the end (sorry but I had to say it), the plot was very smart and potentially wicked. Good luck in the contest.
Not as good a story as you usually write, but anything that makes me laugh out loud has merit in it's own right. Four stars.