All Comments on 'Holly's Summer Break'

I quit reading when I was directed to read scenario 1 or 2. If you want to write 2 stories then do it. Don't be lazy and make the reader do the work for you.

Seriously? You couldn't have just read the first story straight through, ignoring the second half? (eye roll) That, my friend, is lazy.

I preferred the second story... but it wasn't played out too well. The guys raping her would NOT have cum ON her... they would have cum IN her! What real rapist is gonna stop and pull his cock out when actually raping a tender, young girl? He'd be too turned on to stop and pull out!

Also, I felt it was really tacky to write two different versions of the story, It's YOUR story... so choose a direction and stick with it!