All Comments on 'Home Again - Prep for Soph Year Pt. 01'

Story is choppy or something - was not interesting 1*

Learn how to write dialogue and punctuate it. This is like a 3rd grader doing his first paper.

I loved it. I think I'm in love with mom

Good start. Very hot! Five stars and a favorite point!

Richard should have a great summer. Mom's friends will give his cock a workout.

That was incredibly hard to read. Spelling and punctuation errors throughout, not a single quotation mark in sight. And to think I had a story rejected because I had two different characters speaking in the same paragraph. Please, for the love of all things great and small, get a damn editor.

A possible good story ruined by bad grammer, syntax & spelling, together being a "machine gun" rattle story, no depth, no leading into various actions, just rat-tat-tat-tat-tat...... The complete mess up made the storyline bland, not interesting & not erotic, but with "padding out", editing, proof reading & spelling corrections it could be a success