All Comments on 'Home Alone with Daddy'

I enjoyed the story but there are some editing errors that you should consider fixing and getting an editor to help in future submissions.

Brilliant start, please continue.

find an editor. The grammar could be improved.

why in the hell would she want to fuck some control freak and asshole step-father, is the girl retarded?

Thank you for excellent writing

Michael

Check your spelling when you proofread.

A decent start, but the ending was rather abrupt and unsatisfying.

if you gonna steal somebody's story - make sure you do whole thing , also make sure that

you add least couple of your own things going around :-) :-)

Very nicely done. First times should aways be like that. Thank you, and please write more.

In the reading my mind wanted to see the authors face as I exploded in my pants. In between the lines I created an image. I thank the writer. I may have to create an account, to follow her. A very talented creative mind. Ever onwards.

Story line was too compressed and the ending too abrupt - Oh yeah, the past tense for thrust is still thrust and not thrusted . . . .